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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone11/21/04

I like

very good
use of wood
and water

this line does not blend as the others do
"like silken ribbon"

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by WickedEve11/21/04

suggestion:

lure of curves
she lie(s)
like [silken] ribbon

()add
[]subtract

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by WickedEve11/21/04

mentioned

on the new poems thread.

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by sack11/24/04

less is more.....

I was just curious, how can a "flooded pool" protrude? I have difficulties visualizing that! Otherwise, an economy of words, delightfully placed. You are quite the poet!

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by LilDarlin11/27/04

Amazing~

I bow* to you an your imagery~~!! Awesome use here.
Just love this poem Art. It shows~ an tells.. **Bravo**

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