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Wonderful poem! I was doing some playing around below. I think your poem would look really nice this way. Also, in each stanza and each line, I would start out with a capital letter. Hope you don't mind. Christina
what did i do,
letting you walk out that door
my heart is broken,
my life is tore
My ying yang~
life is a ying yang...grin ...cycle ...yet walk straight
in circles...lost but then found low high
good bad rough smooth hard soft grin frown
push pull now then rights wrong then wrongs
right now no yes question answer start finish
Emotion~
I could fel the emotion seeping thru this poem from the first line. Your imagery is so simple and yet it sticks, and pulls ya in. I loved the flow too. Slow..steady.. taking one on a nice lil ride and holding you with captivating interest. More Please~~!!
being cute...grin~
your poems glisten~
waves howdy~
christina
hey very good
i like the way you play
so enjoy yourself today
is what i say.
NIN.
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