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Change~
Wow..Love how you changed the tone of this poem as opposed to the previous two.
You imagery just keeps gettin better and better. Think you must have a big ole book lookin up all those playful phrases in. Loved this one too.
Left me with the feelin that there is change coming and err not the money kind
More Please~~!
Your becoming a master of your story
You are taking direction from your players. Bringing them more to life. More real.
Love the subtle change its flowing naturally no working hard for it. Place your pen to paper the rest will get done.
Great Part 3.....More please.
Keeps improving
with each installment Art...that Lady Laura is a busy girl...
Desires...
This one was excellent. You can feel the built up tension of the men and the joy that Laura finds in one that catches her fancy... Tone changes, again! These poems are an artful display of outstanding seduction! The interested piqued in the first, more.. please.. then the second rawness making the reader go.. hmmmm and the third WOW. Delving into the inner core of your players.Then dropping off to the forbidden.. the she wolf that grabs your selfish erotism... money made.. time for Laura! I want to be Lady Laura.. that is how it made me feel! Great stuff.. Question is can I take more? HA.. lets go see!
Du Lac
keeps getting better....
In the last stanza, if you had ended the second line with "no more-ah" , you would have created an interesting three word rhyme. Also, regarding "Little pricks with knives", did you mean to use the word "too"?
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