by LordDominik
i see why no comments yet, no real background way to rushed and no end it all equals a half assed story. glad you stopped writing.
You might want to double check your spelling, not a lot of errors but enough to hitch the flow of reading. The choice of having them strip before finding a location is a little strange. I know it is tempting to write about cum shots that are copious, but it can cross into excessive really quickly. Better than a lot of other things on here though.