by She Needs
what a wondeful story. I could feel what Kim felt You're an excent writer I'm going to look now to see what else you've writeen. I hope it's alot! Gloria
this really stinks, if this is the best you can do in writing erotic stories, then I strongly recommend that you go back into writing children books, because there is nothing sexy or erotic about your story, what a waste.
Who obviously has no imagination and can't write his way out of a papaer bag
I loved this story. You might want to proof read your stories a bit more closely, cause sometimes a word is missing which causes a hitch in the flow. Also I would have loved a part 2, at least. However, I really enjoyed this. :)
I'm late to the party and not sure you'll even read this but ignore the obvious jealousy (or perhaps pure ignorance) of one commentator and enjoy the others. It was beautiful - lyrical,soft and slow to build but then a crescendo that was firm and exciting without descending to the cheap use of cliche.
There's still some of their weekend left and though it feels a little late I can't help but rise and clap my hands and shout 'encore!'