by LordDragonFire
I like the start of the story but I agree with the previous comment, there wasn't much of a transition and the time when the two different past sections are happening is confusing, but I really like the story and like the fact that you brought in bondage without using sex.
So I agree that the changes in character can be a tad confusing, both the subs and the guys, but as with most of your stories this is a great opening chapter. I can't speak for all your fans but I know I would love to see you develop your current stories more. You have such awesome beginnings but it's kind of a let down that they never get continued.
This is an interesting beginning but well you keep writing interesting beginnings. I hope you actually continue at least some of these stories because they're currently incomplete.
Keep it up but use like dashes or something to indicate a change in perspective