All Comments on 'Mark Has Fun at the Office'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Mark has fun at the office

Fair rambling. This tale is decent and suggestively erotic.

There are some finesse issues. Sofa, sofa. Sometime capitalized, sometimes not. There must be a reason for this but I can't find it.

The back room...I would think housekeeping would keep it dust free, or Lab Staff. These folks are clean freaks. The rule we've always had is "always do the dishes." Same goes for the vacuuming. Someone does this weekly.

Multiple descriptions of tit size is not the same as foreshadowing.

You've taken a normal woman and made her ugly. When you step a woman down from, "no raving beauty," to, "she wasn't bad looking either," you've planted the seed that she could stop a Benz truck. Never step a woman down, even in real life over the porter. Always make it a positive attribute, even if she can stop a Benz.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Tara!

I want a story with Tara! Maybe Carol & Tara!

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