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The Cook's Revenge Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous12/09/04

Undeveloped

Characters seem to have no motivation. The payoff is dreadful.

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by Anonymous12/09/04

In need of more background

There seems to be no rythm or reason for the main character's hatred of stuck up bitches, more background on his reasons would help

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by Anonymous12/20/04

Concept is interesting But

Proofread - proofread - have another proofread as spellcheck won't ketch wrong turds that are spelled write.

As others have said setting / background are the foundation for a good entertaining story - take your time - do it write ah right.

Onward and upward - it will get better - write? - regards

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by Anonymous01/04/05

virgins really give it up that easy?

characters = unbelievable

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