I thought it was great, as write more you will get used to writing in the same person, but the emotion was there and the characters were realistic. Don't be put off and write part two!!!....Good luck
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Anonymous02/13/05
Eh..
Seems like you rushed the beginning... not really developing the characters or scenario thoroughly enough.
And then the rest was eh.. it was okay.
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Anonymous04/24/05
Need more
Come on!!! What's going to happen next. You can't just leave us hanging with it ending like that. The story was great for those of us that have hardly no romance in their lives or those of us that thought that we had true love and end the end not. Please add more to the story.
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Anonymous08/16/06
Pretty Good
good love story - 1 little detail made me shake my head - the hymen is NOT 3 inches into a woman, it's basically on the outside. Very nice otherwise.
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Anonymous05/27/07
ok
I liked the story but I think you rushed it too much. Plus you switched from first person to third person in the middle of the story. I hate it when people do that. You need better grammar but I thought the idea was wonderful. Thanx.
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Anonymous04/04/08
quite good
good story but you didn't make it very believable, why would kat suddenly tell him about her crush for no reason?
other than that, a good story!
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Anonymous01/14/09
Oh, I remember Sigonella
Story could use some more work, like other comments say, but I sure remember Sigonella-I wass stationed there as Military police when the ACHILLE LAURO hijacking went down. Gopod place, and he is right, Moto is right outside the dtae, partway up the volcano.
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Anonymous09/03/13
female anatomy
Correction to female anatomy:
The female hymen is either partial or completely covering the vigana enterance not 3" inside. Please can we all just get this straight for once?
English
What happens to these two next?
I thought it was great, as write more you will get used to writing in the same person, but the emotion was there and the characters were realistic. Don't be put off and write part two!!!....Good luck
Eh..
Seems like you rushed the beginning... not really developing the characters or scenario thoroughly enough.
And then the rest was eh.. it was okay.
Need more
Come on!!! What's going to happen next. You can't just leave us hanging with it ending like that. The story was great for those of us that have hardly no romance in their lives or those of us that thought that we had true love and end the end not. Please add more to the story.
Pretty Good
good love story - 1 little detail made me shake my head - the hymen is NOT 3 inches into a woman, it's basically on the outside. Very nice otherwise.
ok
I liked the story but I think you rushed it too much. Plus you switched from first person to third person in the middle of the story. I hate it when people do that. You need better grammar but I thought the idea was wonderful. Thanx.
quite good
good story but you didn't make it very believable, why would kat suddenly tell him about her crush for no reason?
other than that, a good story!
Oh, I remember Sigonella
Story could use some more work, like other comments say, but I sure remember Sigonella-I wass stationed there as Military police when the ACHILLE LAURO hijacking went down. Gopod place, and he is right, Moto is right outside the dtae, partway up the volcano.
female anatomy
Correction to female anatomy:
The female hymen is either partial or completely covering the vigana enterance not 3" inside. Please can we all just get this straight for once?
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