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Huh?
Doesn't make much sense. Is she supposed to stay with her boyfriend, now that's she scared? This story needs a sequel or something to make it have more meaning.
I liked it!
Don't be harsh. For me it was perfectly obvious AND a good story. It got my attention and that's not easy to do.
Cheers!
interesting
yes it was good, and i understand it but i agree with the first comment, is she suppose to stay with him? is she even going to remember what happened other then the rape? like what was in the needle other then a tranquilizer type thing.
your writing is good
The story interesting but who was the guy, what was his service and had he already raped her or was he just scaring her..I guess I agree, for it to be told you do need another chapter, but it was good enough to grab and hang onto my attention.
All hail Justice!
Justice speaks the truth once again! This time his symbolicness is viewed as a one eyed tall thin man in a trench coat. Interesting... A wise man and author once told me that a good complete character in a story needs a scar or deformity. A scar reminds us of an event in their past, a deformity forms as a physical reminder of their oddity, or past event. I would love to hear more about Justice, he immbolized her, and gave her a memory loss drug didn't he? So she will awake to know nothing of her faithful boyfriend and awake in the gutter and serve as her warped lifestyle ideal, aka hooker. Now that Justin has aliminated her boyfriend's gal, will he help him find another? How is he involved in his life? As a knowledgable friend of his, or an observer who meddles in peoples' lives, and her boyfriend thinks him a stranger? Either way his role is as "fifth" businness, which is the character who rarely finds love, but often helps his/her friends out in thier love triangles and problems, and without her/his help and suggestions the other characters find themselves lost. He/she inspires them and changes the plot. They can be mentors, matchmakers, friends etc... Justice is a fifth businness. He lives most likely as a lonely bachelor with the occastional coupling ;) Fighting off the evils and perils of modern society's relationships, to help his fellow humans. Right eh? I bet he's really hot and his piercing stare matches one of a feline due to the loss of the other window to his soul, aka eye. But is the girlfriend really evil? Is Justice banishing her, or simply punishing her so she may regain redemption? We all have our dark twisted fantasies, she's serving hers. Of course you're not really supposed to live them out if it involves hurting your lover. That stupid bitchy whore! More adventures please, a virgin likes to know about the naughty ;) when we're so innocent. You know what WE desire :D i love Justin! hee...hee...
Love it!
This is one of my favorite stories on Literotica! It makes perfect sense. Scary, disgusting, and erotic all at the same time. Mmmm. Thanks!
please consider the following ...
an odd story this, i am not quite sure about my reaction to it. hmm. the opening lines made it difficult to connect with the story, with your next one, try to grab the reader in the first sentence, really get them drawn into the story. aside from that, what a thought provoking way to utterly ruin trust in a relationship. i like the way you think, please keep writing.
Woow
I was wondering what type of story this would be with the title. This was good!!! If I was her, after I got out of that alley he spoke of, I would dump that crazy boyfriend of hers and leave the city. Maybe file a restraining order too. And it's always a bad idea to go out with some random stranger you meet at a bar, or anywhere... I guess she learned that lesson.
(=^_^=)
Normal, level headed people are capable of all sorts in the name of getting their own back.
Story was too short and underdeveloped. But the potential is there. Give it another go!
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