All Comments on 'Kyle and Kelly go to Feronia Pt. 01'

Well written, but too short. I understand this is just the set-up, but I hope future chapters are longer.

Hi, although I like exactly this types of stories (family/nudism), I don't know if I will find a time or interest in following this story, because I hate one page stories. Honestly, how long take to think of this storyline? Ten minutes? From this chapter we know that two families were already on nudist vacation, just two kids from one family will join them for the first time. We also know Kelly and Kyle are average. Episode 2: way to airport. Ep.3: Boarding plane. Ep.4: Landing.

Sorry I know it's very easy to criticize than to write something, but my recommendation: delete this and post whole story. Or at least don't split it like this. You need something interesting even in chapter 1 for readers to keep reading, this chapter has nothing!

So far just a family going on vacation nothing has happened

Well

The foundation is Done

Clear as ice.

It is going to be interesting to see the expansions 😉

This could be an exciting story. With the family in a nudist resort and much more.