by capconman
Not believable at all, how she's so willing to strip so fast. Suspension of disbelief can only go so far...
I was raised rc so i can tell you I love the fantasy ,,, read mine "Father Dale " mmmmmmmmmmm I loved your alot !!!
I was raised rc so i can tell you I love the fantasy ,,, read mine "Father Dale " mmmmmmmmmmm I loved your alot !!!
I'm sorry. As one previous reader commented, suspension of disbelieve can only go so far. You rushed into the scene, so I didn't believe either that the priest would be so unconcerned with getting caught or that the young lady would be so cavalier about the whole experience: neither excited nor repulsed. Maybe you can put yourself more in the story, imagine yourself as one of the characters and that will help you flush out your next story? How would you feel if you were the priest in this story, or the girl for that matter? Complicate your feelings a little more.
Religious erotic stories are always hot and this was no exception! write some more!
It's like this is a synopsis, but worse, a synopsis which basically spoils the non-existent ending by going 'By the way, it was all a bit of fakery, bye.'
I get just writing stuff in the heat of the moment to get your own rocks off, but it really needed to be twice the length to be posted on a literary erotica board in my view.
Yeah, suspension of belief that she so easily undressed.
It is hot, however, visualizing the priest slowly pushed his penis into her and penetrating her innocent Christian pussy.
Abuse of power by priest and naive consent on part of female. Both culpable.
Agreed, too rushed and not able to suspend disbelief. With some character development, details, dialog this could have been a fantastic story. It had so much potential.
The priest commited rape and should be removed from all similar positions and jailed for life!
Found this and read it again. Agree with my previous comment.
On the other hand what the hell has happen to real non consensual stories. Not looking for the mean, violent and gratuitously cruel (really hate any violent acts, blood, knives etc.), but through coercion and reluctantance. Incredulous women that succumb to authority