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hey :)
this is really good!I love the sing-song rhthym you have going on with your lines, this is a good one-
...For ashes to ashes and dust in lust
tornado of emotion cometh he does
really a fun read!
What can I say?
Truly wonderful Art...but then your poems always are. Your poetry stands alone.
Where
did you learn how to talk like that?
"for an affinity of ruin
but budded a flower
that bloomed for awhile"
is good, fits stylistically with the rest. This is a diffucult style to pull off, without desending into the winceworthy realms, and you did hit a couple of spots along the way.
Still one has to admire...
Keep stretching, someday you will master the "four voiced charnel house from hell form" (wink)
Complaint without a cause !
I'm not exactly sure why, but this one irritated me a bit - Maybe that's a good thing ? I did play around trying to say the same but in a more economical form but that didn't work either. Sorry it doesn't quite work for me but I can't figure out why. Maybe it's time for bed>
Wonderfully unique!
Clever, creative work. ~Imp
Spectacular
Wonderful new side Art.
:)
A wonderfully worded poem that plays out nicely, with care in the form of Life. Well-done, Art.
your poem is mentioned
in sunday's new poems review.Nice work art!
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