by silvarman
and a wimp husband coming up in the next chapter.
Why bother?
Vote 1 and move on...
Was there a author gender change in the middle here that I missed? At first I thought it was another crummy loving wives story. Now I don't now what kind of a story it is, besides bad. Don't be shy with the commas either. They're free and fun too!
I could not believe that you switched "voices" between paragraphs! First the husband is telling his story and then suddenly the wife is giving her persepctive. You did this without any transition. That mistake alone made this story virtually unreadable to me. Were you attempting to explore dual personalities or was this simply an error in editing?
Why is it ok for the wife to have sex with anyone without the husband's permission. Isn't that cheating? She did it on her own so she is as guilty to her present husband as her ex-husbands were to her. Sorry I don't buy into it. I would have her get off at the next port and say See Ya.
I saw (read) a transition between 'voices' or narrators. I think that one of the principles between husband and wife is that 'permission' shouldn't be necessary, unless you are a fundamentalist. If that were the case the wife wouldn't be 'dressing' for her husband.
Was hoping another guy or two would join in and help double or triple team this hot lady!
She never shows any inclination to play round,( first para). She's been married a few times and had a number of affairs (second para) who his he kidding, She's not his wife but any bodies slut. Story spoilt, but I love an older woman getting fucked with a bbc, it gives me hope for the future, has I get older, but fantasize about getting fucked by a big black cock. So I would be telling lies if I said I didn't enjoy it.
Well, I had hoped Adam gets Marie so that it just a swapping story. But now it is just a cheating slut story.
I would hope that Marie gets Marie and his wife in a threesome and Keith is left alone in a sequel.