All Comments on 'A Different World Pt. 02'

Want to see the story with pictures of the characters.

Check out Susie in her Boobers outfit. :)

https://www.henrysbustystories.com/a-different-world

As was pointed out in the comments in the previous chapter, you SERIOUSLY need to have an editor, or at LEAST a good proofreader to point out the MANY mistakes in spelling, punctuation and grammar in your writing BEFORE you submit it to Literotica.

It's all fairly minor stuff (mixing up to/too, your/you're, using 's to denote plurals, etcetera), but it still can break a reader's attention and "take them out of your story". At that point, even if for only a moment, the reader stops thinking about the story and starts thinking about the author's apparent disregard for, if not ignorance of, the rules of grammar. Enough errors like that in a story can cause some readers to skip future parts of the story, and to avoid your other stories. That having been said, I AM enjoying the story, which leads me to my question:

Months, maybe even years ago, I read a multi-part story on Literotica which had a VERY SIMILAR premise: A guy wakes up in his dorm room one morning, only to find a girl sleeping there who says that it's HER dorm room! Eventually, he figures out that he somehow woke up on an alternate Earth. Reading some history books, he finds that the Earth he woke up on suffered a horrible plague a generation or so ago, which wiped out a large percentage of the world's population, including nearly all men... Was that other story yours, and this one is set in the same (or a similar) world? Or perhaps you READ that other story, and later WROTE this one as an homage to the other? Just curious,

-Rei

If I find an editor who works well with me, I would love the help. The little I have tried volunteer editors, it left me not wanting to again.

I do all my editing. I will pay attention to what you suggested.

Thank you for your praise of the story.

While I have read a lot on Literotica, I never read a story with the base you described. It sounds interesting, but I did not grow off of the idea.

I did read a story about interesting study habits and plan to add that into 'The door' one day.

If you notice errors in the story, please send me a message noting the errors. It will help my writing grow.

Henry

If you can't see your way past a few errors, go pay for some erotica stories on Kindle or the like. Which, by the way, tend to have the same type of errors for the most part.

It annoys the piss out of me when you jackoffs criticize writers of free material, especially the ones that are putting out good storylines. If you think you can do better, we all await your Magnum Opus.