Becoming His Girl Ch. 03

The End?

Is this really the end? I hope that Wendy/Billy's gay lust goes unquenched. Maybe he could continue to humiliate himself in his search for pleasure.

--smoothboi

vandal24@excite.com

We need more!!!!

We need more of this story. Please don't end it here!

More please

Loved the images of the large hairy cock and the small hairless little boys dick. Can just imagine the please of that large cock or licking the come out of Elle's pussy.

wendy

would love to do wendy/billy..elle and they do me..

nice touch letting the boy/girl get seen by his ex girl in his panties... he needs short skirts and lipstick

so hott

my sissy panties are soaked,,,more

hate it

It was werry mean story and it made me werry angery i hate taht guy and i hope he get hit bye a car. T_T i hate it! its not fair why.......

wtf

I am outraged. The other 2 chapters were hot, but this one just sucked. Hopefully u can redeem yourself with another chapter to this series

DISAPOINTED

Your first two chapers were great. I love the thought of an older man and a young man. I even found the humiliation good but when you brought in the ex-girl friend you lost me and my interest.

Awesome Chapter III

I with this was a true story with my wife and I being his "girls".

A++

Dreaming of a manly Jim to use me...

Not so great

Have to agree with Disappointed on this effort, though to your credit, I will not try to second-guess just which direction would have been a better choice for you to try. Well, except maybe to say that perhaps you could have written that Billy/Wendy actually got the nerve to report Jim's actions to the police, but have it somehow backfire with Jim finding out before anything comes of it. Then have Jim show the pictures to his parents, expecting them to really punish and perhaps even disown Billy, but instead find them be the kind of folks who turn around and report Jim to the police like the upstanding, christian parents they, of course, are. Afterwards, we see them suddenly, perversely turned on at having this submissive, gay transvestite son in their midst, who maybe doesn't really need to got to college after all, but can stay home and be the little pet whore for mummy and daddy and all their friends. Just a thought.

Who Woulda' Thought It !?!

When the door opened and JIm heard his girlfriends voice - I gasped and dropped my prick! But when she got into it and was tossed around on the old cocksperts cock ... I was all in. Sorry to see that the door seemed to be closing between the two men. I'd like to see their sexing continue.

Hmmm!

The ending to this installment was amazingly disappointing. It seemed like an unnecessary and ridiculous plot twist. I mean the sex was hot, but all of it was so that a girl who was pissed off that her closeted boyfriend was disappointing in the sack, so she gets together with a older dominant asshole with a big dick and less commonsense to turn him out himself and humiliate him so that in the end the older man can threaten the boyfriend so he can have her for himself? It seemed so stupid and pointless. The sex seemed to be the only redeeming thing about it, the boyfriend was obviously screwed over, but the girlfriend and the older guy just ended up ruining an amazing gay dominance story by coming off as two pathetic and spiteful losers who could have just dumped the boyfriend, showed him why, and walked off into the sunset and save us all a lot of time. Hell a better ending would have been the boyfriend getting the guy, I was waiting and hoping for it, but nope just disappointment. Wow, usually I'm never this harsh. Oh well!

i agree

never liked the third chapter. you took it to a level that just didn't agree with me.

wow

well i'm kind of disapointed. i guess it's because i like nice happy ending stories. but this story just wasn't my cup of tea

For a different ending

Loved Chapters I & II but this was extremely disappointing. What should have happened is this (okay, it's not my story but this is what I'd love to have read)...

The real Wendy ('Elle') still makes an appearance but it is her instead of Billy ('Wendy') who is rejected and left gagging for Jim's big cock. Jim having rightly chosen Billy's tight boy cunt as a far worthier receptacle for his cock than Wendy's loose sloppy 'real' cunt.

I also liked chapters I&II and like everyone else didn't care for the last one, I was hoping for a happy ending.

what was that?

The first two was really good. The third one was just mean. Billy was the one who got dumped then it should be wendy who needs to be humiliated. She's the slut/bitch. Jim should have showed Wendy that Billy was the better girlfriend.

hah?

I agree.

Bad ending.

The name of the story gets shot this way and it really was mean.

i disagree

I like the ending because it's mean. I didn't expect it so I was shocked. I fully expect the rest of his life to be an out of control bisexual storm of confusion

I agree with the rest, this was a let-down

Too bad that the gay orientation was replaced by other stuff, and the young girl was involved.....come on, lets have all men only, mmmm

di

Unexpected but good

I certainly didn't expect that sort of ending, but isn't it refreshing to get a surprise? Jim and Wendy have given Billy a wonderful gift. He now knows he loves sucking cock, he loves anal sex, and he loves being dominated by older men. What a wonderfully liberating discovery for a man so young! Imagine how many years he might have spent fumbling around with girls, ducking in and out of the closet. Many of us discover who we truly are, way too late. My one regret is that we don't yet know who Billy gets be with later on. Maybe we will....

Jim is Pathetic

What kind of wimp humiliates the ex boyfriend of his girlfriend when it's obvious that Billy no longer wants Wendy. Jim's turned him off to women. Jim's actions just goes to show how insecure and childish the older man is. If Wendy was smart, she'd dump Jim. But, she's not.

Ch 1 and 2 were awesome, but...

The end of this one was a bit of a slump in the story. The others were glorious, and fun. This was painful and a little backwards. Is it really necessary to feminize the last boyfriend, when you're already an Adonis with a massive cock? Doesn't that show a very low amount of confidence (and brainpower), even when being compared to slim teen with a hidden love for cock? Lol. And if this really was the ultimate goal, why pay him the $200 in the last chapter? Makes no sense other than to throw him off when he wasn't even expecting a stab in the back. The logic just doesn't seem to be there...

Aw that was a letdown kinda...

Kinda pissed me off at the end...if I was in that position I wouldn't been all out...but other than that it was kinda q letdown for me I wish you got someone better...

Weakest link!

The first chapter was ace the second was good but in the last one it should have been Elle who was humiliated not sexy wee Billy. Definitely the poorest chapter here, and you've killed the franchise too, Jim went from being a God to a total douche bag in my view.

amazing.

I liked every word of it for one it was totaly out there and totaly different

Loved It!

I loved this chapter because I've been trying to persuade my boyfried to let me wear a strap-on and let me take him in the ass.

Bonafont

I didn't like Wendy's ex show up, I mean, ugh,

fantastic.? no more chapters to read.?

Ugh

Wen Elle showed up it ruined the story for me

Becoming a girl

After a long straight life as a Dom, I became Bi a couple of years ago. After reading this story I regret I'm too old to become a submissive slave slut to a real Dom Master!

Stranger things have happened...

I'm thirty-nine years old. When I was thirty-four I was married to a hot, voluptious woman. We split up after enjoying some exciting times with other couples and after I'd shared her with several friends. I began seeing a high class Dominatrix who was also hot. She'd tie me to the bed at places like the Omni or Hilton and whip my ass and tease me, of course, I was naked when she did this. One evening she fucked me with a penis-like dildo unexpectedly while I was tied up. What hurt like hell at first became an incredibly pleasurable experience. I came without her touching my rock-hard dick and I was hooked. She fucked on several other occasions and she knew I loved it. One evening she brought a Dom with her and he fucked me. Since that time I've learned how incredible it is to surrender my ass to a dominant man. I still prefer women (I think), but I need a strong man to discipline me and let me please him.

Not happy with Ch 3

Tomass-

The first two chapters were great - definitely worth the read and my spunk.

Ch 3 was a letdown. Seems that you just wanted to finish the series and move on. That's ok, but you have talent and I wish you'd have shown that in the last chapter.

I don't think that Wendy/Elle's arrival fit in with the rest of the series. While the first two chapters were plausible, Ch 3 stretched too far. I encourage you to read and rewrite Ch 3. You obviously have a lot of readers and many positive comments.

Thanks.

wendy realy needed to eat jims cum from ellies used pussy

Sad

Could have been better, and again dinky why even bother reading them asshole, wheres your story or your other two profile's story. shut up.

pitty

to bad that it ending that way. i like a end who the boy get the man not the woman.

hated it

come on that was awful - from sweet dominance and submission to this. Jim loves boys. Its really his struggle!! He is kidding himself with a female.

Bad choice, stud

Any horney stud knows a guy´s boy pussy is far better than a teenage girl´s shallow pussy.

Big come down

I was VERY disappointed with the third chapter of the story, indeed; I almost wish that I hadn't read it.
A girl with a strap on - really? Boo!
Jim is not as effeminate as portrayed here, and Elle seems like some sort of wannabe domme.
This was the ruination of a fine tale.
I might well read chapters 1 and 2 again, but NOT chapter 3!
Both of my thumbs are way down, even if it still got me hard and dripping.

I did not see that coming

Honestly i would have preferred if you kept it guy on guy but hey it's your story and although I may not have done the same, I respect your choices. All in all the 3 were good...(minus few spelling and grammatical errors.)

P.S.
I would have soo fucked Bill..Wendy, I like very submissive guys and making them my bitches. Anyway- respect.

Disappointed

I enjoyed chapters 1 & 2 and the start of this chapter but bringing Wendy/Elle in made me keep reading to see where this was going. Had Jim brought her in to humiliate her or show Billy/Wendy what a cunt she actually was then I would have been ok with it. However, having Jim choose her after persuing Billy was truly disappointing. I would have thought such a powerful man could have kept him and helped him through college.

Alternate Ending???

Try to change the ending and make Elle look shame when Jim come back for Wendy!

THE WORST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I HATED THIS ONE SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!! JIM ENDED UP BEING AN ASS!!!!!!!!!! THAT WAS UNCALLED FOR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! >:(

nice

It was really a turn on all the saga, especially this one. Nice job

Meh

Was ok didnt like the ending

Chapter 3 killed the whole story........

I loved the first and second part but this one was so disappointing. I mean you have a great thing going and then you end it so horribly. I think you tried to hard. You really should just delete the part 3. I kind of ruined the series for me.

Third part ruined whole series

Having a twist at the end of the story just to shock the reader whether it fits the story or not is unpleasant. I am one disappointed reader.

I agree with the others

The first two parts were really good and very exciting. But this installment really sucked. It was a huge deviation from the first two parts. I expected a better ending then that. There was no indication of the story taking that nasty turn. Very disappointing.