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Morning Walk

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by Anonymous

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by Tathagata12/15/04

Wow

there are some Great lines in this:

~If I could only crush the sky with morter and pestle, I would.
I’d press it into little cakes,
and use it to draw you pictures of my day.~
and this:

~They seem to laugh as I walk past them in boots not slippers,
and peek at me shyly over the edges of their diamond fans.~

That is some great writing
I am going to add this to my favorites
that last verse........
whew
I'm jealous
Thank you for sharing

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by Reltne12/15/04

5

Almost perfect! The only line I question is the second, "Clomp, clomp on my feet." The double 'clomps' bother me a bit. Other than that I love the way each stanza has its own stand-alone thought yet builds to a whole with the others.


I don't do thermothingies

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by flyguy6912/15/04

Wonderful images, here

I love the portrayal of trees as shy debutantes. Wonderful poem, willow.

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by annaswirls12/16/04

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mentioned in today's reviews http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?s= &postid=10737310#post10737310

no thermometer reading

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