I agree that this makes wonderful ending. But I wish there were more! A spinoff mayhap? hehe
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Anonymous02/26/05
Please....
Give me more!!
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Anonymous04/02/05
WOW
I just read the entire story, start to finish. I have to say, I'm totally amazed. This has to be one of the best I've ever read on this site, in this subject. I,too, am sorry to see it end, but it was an excellent series you should be very proud of.
Thank you for the "education". I was on the edge of my seat through the entire series. What a fabulous weave of narrative threads. An erotic tapestry. I can only hope to become as deliciously seductive as the subs you have written so lovingly about.
I just read the whole story from beginning to end non stop and will probably visit it again soon. Excellent work! Thank you Sir.
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Anonymous06/06/08
A fab read!
I only wish I could have given this story a 6, instead of just a 5. A great story & well written. Honestly, this is one of the best erotic stories I have read.
Thanx for sharing.
I loved the way you explained some of the basics during the story and the way you illustrated how important honesty is in any relationship. A very well written narrative.
by
Anonymous09/14/08
excellent!
Sir, this was an excellent story! i've read all of them now and i think they are some of the best demonstrations of BDSM that are relatable to real life.
11/10 for me! You are a great writer!
xxx0
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Anonymous02/05/09
Great work!
I've just read through this series, and I have to say this story has to be one of the best I've read on Literotica. Great explanation of the worries and trials of a budding Dom. However, there is an inconsistency I would mention: where did Annie's panties come from in this chapter? When they got to the party, she wasn't wearing any. Anyway, it's a minor problem, and this story was incredibly sexy and interesting. Good work!
I sincerely enjoyed your tale. Please continue writing...you're very talented.
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Anonymous10/06/10
wow
your story is amazing. i couldnt stop reading it. very well written. however, i would like a little less of addressing who they are talking to. people dont usually say who they're talking to in every sentence they speak to the other person. does that make sense? it just got a little repetitive sometimes. but other than that, it was a great story. good plot too. had me wondering what was happening, and questioning as to who was really who they said they were. thanks!
you have written an awesome story and i hate to have finished it! usually i start reading stories here and get bored with yhem but this one i just want to keep reading. thank you and your editor for one of the best erotic stories i've ever read and i have been reading them for almost 30 years.
Great story,loved the whole thing,would enjoy more.
by
Anonymous04/17/11
Well done
Very well done. I love the plot and your characters are well built. By far my favorite story on this site. I wish there was a second series!
by
Anonymous05/02/11
Awesome!
the characters are very well built and the storty just keeps you coming back for more!I love it!!
by
Anonymous06/05/11
Simply Amazing
Your story is amazing through and through.....i read every chapter in less than 2 days in my spare time that i had....kept me coming back for more and more!!!! Your ending is simply......BEAUTIFUL!!!!
by
Anonymous06/21/11
Wow!
This was absolutely amazing!! I LOVED it!!!!! I sure hope you are continuing the story, as i would surely read it with immense excitement. Well done! :*
good work - a little more exposition regarding the 'plot' - still have no idea why Sylvia was targetted in the first place. really good story elements and very hot scenes with excellent descriptions of the erotic stuff - well crafted.
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Anonymous09/06/11
Incredible!
Incredible! I couldn't wait to read more! Please write more. I get lost in your stories.
I enjoyed every naughty moment, wishing I could trade places with dear Annie.
Fantastic job, SN. You outdid yourself.
-a
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Anonymous07/12/12
WONDERFUL!!!
If I could, 5 wouldn't be enough! they need 100 stars for this story. I"ve written a few but none like this!
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Anonymous09/19/12
Loved the story 1 thing I'm pretty sure at the beginning of the party she was wearing a gown and no underwear and at the end she's wearing a little black dres and a thong
Your writing is phenomenal! I keep coming back and rereading...i am unable to find anything comparable on this site! Truly grand, and inspiring.
Thank You very much, for all of Your stories!! They are informative, and sexy. They build up to a climax so well...*shiver*
Your characters are so deep. I find myself relating to a character, in every story You have written.
I wish You could continue to post writings, here. *pout*
by
Anonymous06/28/13
Fantastic
The whole story was simply great. You have such command over your words, you are able to bring them to life seamlessly. Congratulations on a job well done.
by
Anonymous09/17/13
Great story
Loved the story, couldn't put it down. Was a little let down with the speech by Chantelle "no such thing as a pain slut" her speech seamed a bit hypocritical.
Was also a little lost why the two bosses wanted to punish Syliva for her having a scandalous picture.? Just seemed a bit odd.
Another note, Roger seems a bit too knowledgable to be just starting, since he knows what a St Andrews Cross is, a horse, and many other things... maybe his background story should have been different?
Still an amazing story, I look forward to reading more of your work.
by
Anonymous03/04/14
Please Continue!!!!!
I would rate this as one of the best stories I have ever read on this site.
I liked the way it had a plot and not some get in and get out story line.
The way it was written let your imagination take over and really get into the story.
I could not believe how I could not stop reading and waiting for the next chapter.
My only complaint is how it ended very quickly. I thought there was plenty of story to continue with. What happened to Sylvia and Chantelle? Did Josephine get kicked out of the club? Where did Roger and Annie go from here? Did Georgia get involved with Annie and Roger.
The perfect ending...
...answers all the questions that need answering, without giving more information than is realistic. Splendid. Just splendid.
~ magical ~
Dear Sir, this story is my favorite. i'm soooo sorry its ending but Wow. what a story. thankyou. Amazing ending. incredble. im breathless.
~*~
perfect
A perfect end to this piece.
You've done very well and should be proud of your efforts.
thank you for sharing it with us.
Aaaawwwwwwww
pouts hugely
i love this story =)
M
Amazing Again!
I agree that this makes wonderful ending. But I wish there were more! A spinoff mayhap? hehe
Please....
Give me more!!
WOW
I just read the entire story, start to finish. I have to say, I'm totally amazed. This has to be one of the best I've ever read on this site, in this subject. I,too, am sorry to see it end, but it was an excellent series you should be very proud of.
Amazingly real...
Thank you for the "education". I was on the edge of my seat through the entire series. What a fabulous weave of narrative threads. An erotic tapestry. I can only hope to become as deliciously seductive as the subs you have written so lovingly about.
awesome!
I just read the whole story from beginning to end non stop and will probably visit it again soon. Excellent work! Thank you Sir.
A fab read!
I only wish I could have given this story a 6, instead of just a 5. A great story & well written. Honestly, this is one of the best erotic stories I have read.
Thanx for sharing.
A very long read-but a good one.
I loved the way you explained some of the basics during the story and the way you illustrated how important honesty is in any relationship. A very well written narrative.
excellent!
Sir, this was an excellent story! i've read all of them now and i think they are some of the best demonstrations of BDSM that are relatable to real life.
11/10 for me! You are a great writer!
xxx0
Great work!
I've just read through this series, and I have to say this story has to be one of the best I've read on Literotica. Great explanation of the worries and trials of a budding Dom. However, there is an inconsistency I would mention: where did Annie's panties come from in this chapter? When they got to the party, she wasn't wearing any. Anyway, it's a minor problem, and this story was incredibly sexy and interesting. Good work!
What a perfect ending
to a very great story. It started off a bit awkwardly, but you definitely caught it by the third chapter. Well done.
great!
i really enjoyed this story from start to finish
Well Woven Tale
I sincerely enjoyed your tale. Please continue writing...you're very talented.
wow
your story is amazing. i couldnt stop reading it. very well written. however, i would like a little less of addressing who they are talking to. people dont usually say who they're talking to in every sentence they speak to the other person. does that make sense? it just got a little repetitive sometimes. but other than that, it was a great story. good plot too. had me wondering what was happening, and questioning as to who was really who they said they were. thanks!
where's the next chapter??? lol
you have written an awesome story and i hate to have finished it! usually i start reading stories here and get bored with yhem but this one i just want to keep reading. thank you and your editor for one of the best erotic stories i've ever read and i have been reading them for almost 30 years.
awesome
Great story,loved the whole thing,would enjoy more.
Well done
Very well done. I love the plot and your characters are well built. By far my favorite story on this site. I wish there was a second series!
Awesome!
the characters are very well built and the storty just keeps you coming back for more!I love it!!
Simply Amazing
Your story is amazing through and through.....i read every chapter in less than 2 days in my spare time that i had....kept me coming back for more and more!!!! Your ending is simply......BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Wow!
This was absolutely amazing!! I LOVED it!!!!! I sure hope you are continuing the story, as i would surely read it with immense excitement. Well done! :*
great story
good work - a little more exposition regarding the 'plot' - still have no idea why Sylvia was targetted in the first place. really good story elements and very hot scenes with excellent descriptions of the erotic stuff - well crafted.
Incredible!
Incredible! I couldn't wait to read more! Please write more. I get lost in your stories.
Fantastic
I have loved every chapter from start to finish. Just love your writing Sir_Nathan. xxx
loved it
I loved this story. It is definitely one of the best I've read! More please, Sir Nathan?
Fantastic...
I enjoyed every naughty moment, wishing I could trade places with dear Annie.
Fantastic job, SN. You outdid yourself.
-a
WONDERFUL!!!
If I could, 5 wouldn't be enough! they need 100 stars for this story. I"ve written a few but none like this!
Loved the story 1 thing I'm pretty sure at the beginning of the party she was wearing a gown and no underwear and at the end she's wearing a little black dres and a thong
Gah!!
No! It's over!! Ohhh, no, i want more!! Please?
Your writing is phenomenal! I keep coming back and rereading...i am unable to find anything comparable on this site! Truly grand, and inspiring.
Thank You very much, for all of Your stories!! They are informative, and sexy. They build up to a climax so well...*shiver*
Your characters are so deep. I find myself relating to a character, in every story You have written.
I wish You could continue to post writings, here. *pout*
Fantastic
The whole story was simply great. You have such command over your words, you are able to bring them to life seamlessly. Congratulations on a job well done.
Great story
Loved the story, couldn't put it down. Was a little let down with the speech by Chantelle "no such thing as a pain slut" her speech seamed a bit hypocritical.
Was also a little lost why the two bosses wanted to punish Syliva for her having a scandalous picture.? Just seemed a bit odd.
Another note, Roger seems a bit too knowledgable to be just starting, since he knows what a St Andrews Cross is, a horse, and many other things... maybe his background story should have been different?
Still an amazing story, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Please Continue!!!!!
I would rate this as one of the best stories I have ever read on this site.
I liked the way it had a plot and not some get in and get out story line.
The way it was written let your imagination take over and really get into the story.
I could not believe how I could not stop reading and waiting for the next chapter.
My only complaint is how it ended very quickly. I thought there was plenty of story to continue with. What happened to Sylvia and Chantelle? Did Josephine get kicked out of the club? Where did Roger and Annie go from here? Did Georgia get involved with Annie and Roger.
Please continue this Series!!!!!
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