Pretty good writing, above average kink. Didn't like the alternate endings. IMO, pick the right ending for the story and write it. I know others prefer alternative outcomes but I like it when an author knows what they want to say and says it.
Can't give you a five because you didn't explore any of the why's of her kinky desires but four's not bad. Keep at it.
I prefer neither. I think it would have been hotter if when the charactor was bent over the table, a penis was presented to her to suck and then the ending would have left you with not knowing who the other man was and who took the charactor from the front and behind.
English
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Ending 2, please
Nice
nice start...keep working at it...very hot
two...and lets hear a continuation
Loved it
liked the story loved the choice of endings very good
very hot
great hot story. My gf loved it. we both vote for ending two. Please write what happens the next day. My gf hopes he brings some friends and cameras.
Good kink, liked it
Pretty good writing, above average kink. Didn't like the alternate endings. IMO, pick the right ending for the story and write it. I know others prefer alternative outcomes but I like it when an author knows what they want to say and says it.
Can't give you a five because you didn't explore any of the why's of her kinky desires but four's not bad. Keep at it.
I prefer neither.
I prefer neither. I think it would have been hotter if when the charactor was bent over the table, a penis was presented to her to suck and then the ending would have left you with not knowing who the other man was and who took the charactor from the front and behind.
Quietman222
Ending number 2 for sure.
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