All Comments on 'Jealous Friend'

NOT FUCKING ROMANCE!

Really. On what planet? BDSM sure. Only a moron would think romance. 2 stars. Get an editor or a counseler before writing more please.

LizardKing73

"She felt herself close now, panting and grabbing her sheets with her second hand.

"I'm gonna, I'm gonna," she whined, grinding shamelessly against his mouth, clutching the desk for dear life."

She's on a stranger's desk, 'grabbing her sheets?' Who's desk is covered with sheets you can grab? Sheets of paper?

I liked your story, it does need some grammar editing, but overall, it's a good start. Maybe add more context and history to the characters, they must be in love since they're so hot for each other and it's obvious he cares for her deeply.

It was romantic. They've been friends for a long time and he got jealous and protected her. Sure, some things need to be corrected but I'm sure the people who commented stupid/disrespectful shit got hard/wet from reading it, probably even came. That was my goal and I reached it so I gave you 5 stars. Please continue the good work and write a sequel. I enjoyed the story line.

Damn that was hot 🥵

Loved it!

Sweet and hot little story! Write more!