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this work
is an absolute jewel forged with great thought...love,,,it...
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Mer ry Christmas~
new poem review
Your poem was mentioned on the thread
"New Poem Reviews"
Merry Christmas~
NIce work
However. I have read many of your works, just never commented. I know your style, your intent, or I like to think I do. This section-
your image evolves like a swirling oil screen
prismatic amoeba slide from my fingers,
flickered lights flash shadowed branches
from here, no
there!
how about--
your image evolves, a swirling sheen
prismatic amoeba slide from fingers,
flickered lights flash
shadowed branches from here, no!
there
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sheen implies oily, "my" is understood. Very nice work, and I love your imagination. Keep it up-
Gulp!
tasty poem, seattle! I love the amorphous structure and language-- works well for this poem.
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