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by flyguy6912/27/04

Awww!

Very touching, Mutt! Nice rhymes, not cloying. I think you could do more with the image of his lover; build upon the sunlight knife or the savior theme. I like the former better.

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by WickedEve12/27/04

wow

It's hard to believe a mutt is such a great writer. ;)

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by twelveoone12/29/04

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Ok, I do like this line, alot, I will probably steal it someday forgetting where it came from.
"and passes days alone, apart, accursed."
Well done, the only criticism, I would have is it looks like it was written in another century, and thus vaguely over familiar. "Tomb Raider" nice touch, would not have minded something startling in this.

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