WOW ... Tantalizing tail ... I meant tale.
this is an excellent story.
Steaming, Romantic, Erotic and
I have just been Angela'd
thanks Annora
for your witty and erotic writes
that entertain and intrigue a vast
number of people with your clever
literary Art creations, your tail
(I meant tales!!!)
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Anonymous01/06/05
Your criticism didn't include any aactual sentence
Terribly written. Void of punctuation and proper grammar.
Or put another way:
This submission is terribly written (as are your others). It is not completely void of punctuation...but enough to make me wonder why nobody else has pointed this out...or if they have, why you ignore them. Why not try an editor to improve your work?
Are these sentences better for you?
I have never written for the "rating part of this procedure." It's been enjoyed by well over two thousand readers. Most before the first ten hours.
As far as anonymous speeches if you can't speak with your name being out front. What you say isn't worth reading. So settle scores I will still write. I won't delete comments I have a life off Lit. I just find this enjoyable even with you on it.
I think you reach your full talent in prose more than poetry. There are few punctuation issues, but the content is compeling, and this is basically a hot read. Thank you!
I think some of the critics have missed the point.This isn't a story in the usual sense ; you have to feel it, smell it, touch it, be it, rather than just read it. It's like poetry in that the reader has to react ,to make some input.To me Scott & Angela aren't characters so much as two facets of a shared experience.I liked it
No...Ishtat...the point hasn't been missed. ALL the criticism has been about grammar and lack of punctuation.
Take this from the last para:
"I slowly opened my mouth to show him his white cum threw my head back allowing him to watch my long neck swallow his nectar proudly."
The cum threw her head back. That's how it reads without punctuation. There are numerous examples like this in all Annora's stories.
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Anonymous01/12/05
Erhmmm....good but -
I hate to say it, but while the content of the story was good, I couldn't get more than 3 paragraphs into it. The structure and composition of the piece was severely lacking. A little more punctuation in strategical places would improve the readablility of this 10 fold.
English
Wow
Terribly written. Void of punctuation and proper grammar.
Grammar lesson
Your criticism didn't include any aactual sentences.
Erotic Supreme~
WOW ... Tantalizing tail ... I meant tale.
this is an excellent story.
Steaming, Romantic, Erotic and
I have just been Angela'd
thanks Annora
for your witty and erotic writes
that entertain and intrigue a vast
number of people with your clever
literary Art creations, your tail
(I meant tales!!!)
Your criticism didn't include any aactual sentence
Terribly written. Void of punctuation and proper grammar.
Or put another way:
This submission is terribly written (as are your others). It is not completely void of punctuation...but enough to make me wonder why nobody else has pointed this out...or if they have, why you ignore them. Why not try an editor to improve your work?
Are these sentences better for you?
Please understand one thing...
I have never written for the "rating part of this procedure." It's been enjoyed by well over two thousand readers. Most before the first ten hours.
As far as anonymous speeches if you can't speak with your name being out front. What you say isn't worth reading. So settle scores I will still write. I won't delete comments I have a life off Lit. I just find this enjoyable even with you on it.
Thank you,
Annora
I liked this!
I think you reach your full talent in prose more than poetry. There are few punctuation issues, but the content is compeling, and this is basically a hot read. Thank you!
Angelaic !
I think some of the critics have missed the point.This isn't a story in the usual sense ; you have to feel it, smell it, touch it, be it, rather than just read it. It's like poetry in that the reader has to react ,to make some input.To me Scott & Angela aren't characters so much as two facets of a shared experience.I liked it
Point not missed
No...Ishtat...the point hasn't been missed. ALL the criticism has been about grammar and lack of punctuation.
Take this from the last para:
"I slowly opened my mouth to show him his white cum threw my head back allowing him to watch my long neck swallow his nectar proudly."
The cum threw her head back. That's how it reads without punctuation. There are numerous examples like this in all Annora's stories.
Erhmmm....good but -
I hate to say it, but while the content of the story was good, I couldn't get more than 3 paragraphs into it. The structure and composition of the piece was severely lacking. A little more punctuation in strategical places would improve the readablility of this 10 fold.
Great Descriptions
Great descriptions, just great, as always Annora .
Hagar
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