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by Anonymous

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by WickedEve12/28/04

this is very good poetry

Well written and it has me thinking.

I read this stanza several times. It's really excellent:
The bowls
sitting upon the cabinet shelf
waiting to hold your cereal
are just as happy
left empty and undisturbed

I would be tempted to change one or both "upon" to "on".

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by sandspike12/28/04

Life is about the weekends

This is a thinking poem. I'll say it shows us what happens
when the work week controls you. Just enough here to get
you thinking about your life and not the poem. That is a good thing.

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by sack12/30/04

that's really inventive....

Personifying the bowls, cups, etc. I think this is more about the daily grind then whether the cups are full or empty. Reminds me of that wonderful Beatles song Eleanor Rigby. Ah, look at all the lonely people!

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