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sacksackabout 19 years ago
That last paragraph made it for me....

Poetry doesn't get too much better than that! I have a couple of questions...in the second stanza, did you purposefully choose "wore" or did you want "worn"? Then, later, did you mean "howling?" Another word I wasn't sure about is "friged". "fringed"? "frigid"? Love the poem anyway, just bringing these words to your attention.

WickedEveWickedEveabout 19 years ago
jagged rock winter

is a wonderful title and makes a great line in the poem.

"tears frozen in drift winds sorrow" is a good line.

I think the second stanza could be improved with a little editing.

And the last two stanza are good, too.

My Erotic TaleMy Erotic Taleabout 19 years ago
way to go Bro~

teach me more <grin>

teacher becomes the student~

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