All Comments on 'New Girl in Town Pt. 08'

The end of this chapter has me more on the edge of my seat than ever. I can’t wait for chapter 9. Thank you for not only the story but the journey you are taking us on. If you need any help editing this story, i would be glad to help out in any way i can via email. Great job AuroraIncident!

Excellent as always!

Great chapter.

Let the story continue to follow to conclusion, please.

Looking forward to seeing more. Learning Jessica’s secrets is going to be very interesting.

I love the story and it sounds like it's therapeutic for you. Just let it flow.

Wow!! Really. Wow!!

This chapter, following several romantic threads, must take some concentration of effort. However, the Jake and Jessica thread can only be couched in the cradle of the friends and school life backdrop.

You really feel the amount Jessica is torn by her emotions towards Jake and her uncertainty about what she should reveal about her past to Jake (already hinted at in earlier chapters).

Now I, and I think many others, are dangling on the cliff edge awaiting the moment that Jessica feels comfortable enough to tell Jake about her hesitancy. We are all hoping she does before Ray reveals the story he learned when he was hot tubbing with Staci.

Keep up the good work. I think we could see probably another ten chapters from this at least.

Devir Ginator <devir.ginator@gmx.com> (still waiting Admins sorting out my account).

I absolutely love this story. Look forward to the next chapter.

It is an amazing story. Really looking foreward to the next chapter.

I have enjoyed every part of this, and keep waiting for the next part.

Great read - Just keep doing what you've done so far and no one should complain.

Good story please continue

Not trying to be a jerk... in the revisions I think we missed when they decided this was a date and discussion about whether he should kiss her good night... I’d like to see it...

You sure know how to leave someone wanting more.. Great stuff mate

'are'"!

Definitely NOT 'is'!!

Comment below is a prime example of people who need to be superior who probably couldn’t lick aurora’s Boots when it comes to character development

Every chapter has been worth the wait thank you

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter(s)

the only thing I can say about this story is it makes me wanting the next part.keep up the good work

This series is like crack to me I can't get enough and I have withdrawals between chapters

""Oh that's right. You're one of those that's ambro-sexist ain't cha?" He asks."

I've been using this word since 1974. It's "Ambro dick trious".

This chapter was the best so far love/hate the cliffhanger you left us. Cant wait for the next chapter.

IS is proper American English. ARE is proper British English. On the west side of the Atlantic the use of 'are' with a collective noun seems frightfully pedantic. Two nations separated by a common language, as often said.

Next......!!!!!!

might help but, in the end, that isn't important because the characters are interesting, the plot progresses and the author continuing the story.

5 stars. Only downside is I have to wait for another month but that is worth it. Stay safe and thank you.

Thank you for this excellent series. Love the characters and the story. Makes my day when I see each new chapter posted.

Hopefully Jake still has Somer and her friends on speed dial. Jessica's parents need to recognize she needs some serious psychotherapy.

Now more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more

Love the story, but seemed like something got edited out between the car lot and when they were eating. The whole part about the shaky hands was referenced a couple time without it being said what it meant.

you'd be surprised by the number of times I refresh your page before I get to see a new chapter installed.

good work though.. just don't let us fall of this cliff. Hanging on for the next chapter

Fantastic series. Keep it up.

Thanks

A good story hinges on the audience "falling in love with," or at least feeling sympathy for, the main characters. Jess consistently treats Jake like garbage and needs to be kicked to the curb.

I find your style of story telling .......wonderful. The character development is well done. You mix serious with humor like you are an old pro at writing. I was hooked with your first story here, The Rescue. You haven't disappointed me with this new story of yours. The way ended this chapter is killing me with suspense. I get the feeling that Patrick and the head cheerleader is working together to get Jake. Keep up the good work because I'll read any story you write.

I am one of the readers who checks in several times a week to see if you posted the next in the series. Your style of writing has me hooked :) I wouldn’t want you to change a single thing just one thing though - I understand real life has its own issues but pls pls do post more often! Once a month is too slow :)

keep em coming you've got us hooked

This chapter was great I truly like the slow build of the story. I would be lying if i said the waiting for chapters sometimes is annoying but a story like this does need its time i agree. I hope to be reading alot more in the near future

Terrific chapter! Keep going and thanks

Please don't make us wait three more weeks for the next one. What a cliffhanger. ^_^

Love the series. Thank you!

Now what? keep going

Personally, I am enjoying this story very much. Continue the great work. I known it is very much appreciated by many.

There are a few wording or grammatical errors in the first couple of pages. Minor. Having another proof reader could help you. You did say you were having some time issues.

But please, do continue. I look forward to reading more.

I'll just assume that the Goldens front door is set up on a porch and Jake was standing on a (much) lower step. And that's the only reason she had to lower her head for the kiss. My imagination for the last seven chapters just refuses to admit that even as tall as she is reputed to be, there's no way she's taller than him.

That aside, I have to admit; you are the maestro of cliffhangers. I'm not sure if that's a good thing or bad. But either way, this was a rather entertaining read (as always). Thanks Aurora.

It's always a good day when I find the next chapter is here, well, apart from my work output that is! Absolutely loved it. Please don't even think about abandoning it. Waiting, impatiently, for the next instalment now! Five stars!

These are great chapters. The formula works: 1) snappy teen dialogue; 2) emotional reservation to move forward well explained; 3) small exposition/resolution of past event; 4) endearing moment; and 5) progression unexpectedly halted.

But I fear it’s becoming too formulaic. We’ve learned some things about our characters and seen some things, but we’re very close to where we were at the end of chapter 3. Stuff happening over an increasing number of pages doesn’t automatically mean development.

I join with a lot of the other reviewers in looking forward to the next chapter. The proofreading does seem better, but I agree about the continuity.

Early on, you got a lot of grief for mixing in some first-person POV. The start of chap. 9 could be a great place to let that pay off: How does Jake feel driving home from Jessica's? A few paragraphs of monologue, mixed with the right soundtrack, could increase our sympathy for him.

I am really enjoying this story, please continue.

Obviously someone else enjoys your story - user "Verticalize" must like it too - he has completely ripped off your ideas and is passing off a crappy version he calls "Best in Class" as his own story. Look at: https://www.literotica.com/s/best-in-class-1

And release the next chapter!

Great read. Can you release the next chapter?

With regards to this feedback, the offer to edit was made by a contributor currently writing a pretty poor rip off of this series, I'd suggest aurora doesn't need your assistance, find your own ideas

When's chapter 9 coming????????I can't wait for it

It is a great series and enjoying reading it . Looking foreward to Chapter 9

been checking on chapter 9 4 a while now..

I see I'm not the only one hanging out for the next chapter. I think you can take that as a compliment.

It is 1 month since we got chapter 8. Chapter 9 please please.

He posted in his profile that he had the flu for a bit. that's why it has taken so long

Can't hardly wait. Love this story. Keeps us wanting to hear more, more.

I have been checking everyday for a month and still no chapter 9

Aurora posted that he submitted today.... Should be posted on Tuesday!

I have been directly in touch with AuroraIncedent and he said he posted chapter nine on Thursday. This after a rewrite when he became dissatisfied with the initial outcome.

It seems that the Lit admins are slowing down feeding stories online. This is evidenced, sometimes, by how few make the New Stories page on a daily basis.

Devir Ginator

How come it isn't in his list of Submissions?

I'm assuming there's a lot of submissions that came in. Chapter 9 is still shown as Pending on my end. Hopefully it'll be available soon.

Do you publish anywhere else? Maybe you should...

This is a really nice story, can't wait to see how it concludes; keep going and please post again soon!

Hey all, I'm planning to wait until Sunday to see if 9 gets posted. If not I'll delete it and reupload it to the back of the queue to see if that gets it published this time. This is very frustrating but I don't know what else I can do at this point.

I love reading your story and always am looking forward to the next chapter.

I try to be patient, but it’s been over a month. Help your fans out and send us another chapter soon!

And I know from your history to look about every month.

The good news is I forget the characters and the background so I get to reread this wonderful series.

Thank you.

I been checking 3 times a day for the past 3 weeks

Love the series!

I have followed this story since the beginning and this is some good writing and a very good story. Looking forward to more from you!

I don't recall a description of his height, or any relative description compared to others, and in this chat ER Sarah has to cock and lower her head to kiss him. Makes me think she might be substantially taller than Jake.

..... this great story is more than “good enough” — so much more.

Do you mean Jessica? At any rate, she's 6'1'' according to the text.

Loving re-reading this story

Good story. Jake needs to MAN UP!!! Cut this Psycho nut out. Jess is obviously in love with someone else. Stop chasing her, pussy!!!

jake is a pussywo fam

Beautiful story!

I'm loving this story and some things like fine wine and single malts need to be appreciated, not quaffed.

Some lines make me laugh out loud,

Could not stop reading, it flows like a movie.

I guess Jessie's having flash backs...............

I was willing to bet money that Patrick and his minions would be at the Drive-In and either hurt Jake or humiliate Jake, or both...

So, I'm assuming Jessica was sexually assaulted or something? I think it's pretty fucked up that she is willing to tell Staci, and I'm assuming what's her name? Jake's cousin...and now Ray knows what this big mystery is, but she won't tell the one person it to whom it actually matters? I thought we were dealing with bright, mature Seniors, not immature Freshmen. And for fuck sake, Jake is the biggest pussy. If you notice, Jessica has been using the word "date" now, but Jake has to make big fuckin' productions announcing, "IT'S NOT A DATE!!"

Maybe should have rewritten it a few more times lol. Scary panic attack kiss FTW! Arousing, erotic reading for sure.

What a hypocritical bitch, btw, telling Ray and Staci but not Jake. She forced out Jake's secret by talking to asshole.

He just needs to start dating others. No reason for him to carry her baggage. No reason for him to suffer her bad decisions.