All Comments on 'You Just Been Angela'd Ch. 02'

by Annora

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ishtatishtatabout 19 years ago
Can do Better

I was fairly kind in my comments on your first chapter. I regret that will have to be qualified. This is basically a good idea and a good story but the punctuation is woeful. The grammar too has a few problems but they are so easy to fix ,why not fix 'em. With the help of an editor you could be pretty good.I strongly recommend you consider using one. I know you were upset by the comments on your first chapter so please take this in the spirit I intend.With a bit of help you will eliminate 90% of the negative comment.

Good luck.

AnnoraAnnoraabout 19 years agoAuthor
Thank you Ishtat

Thank you for the repeated pointing of the short comings.

Since you have never written anything but criticism as of yet.

I appreciate your voice. I'm taking it in the way its been offered.

Annora

My Erotic TaleMy Erotic Taleabout 19 years ago
Vivid~

awesome story A~

I loved the sensual tone she relays

I've been Angela'd ~

grammer ??? a comma? good grief!

nice story Annora, more please this is an

enchanting chapter to a rewarding read.

Looking forward to chapter three <grin>

AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
Anonymous because

In answer to your comment on Chap. 3, some of us readers are not members so we have to remain anonymous when commenting. The criticism is no less valid just because of anonymity and it's made by many others. Why don't you take note?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
good

good story,i wish i was angela"d

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