All Comments on 'Ash's New Life Ch. 01'

Hope you can continue this story, maybe have ya make each chapter longer...this is definately my fantasy

You have a good story started here just keep it going.Like the other person I have dreamed of this happing to me to.

You have a good story started here just keep it going.Like the other person I have dreamed of this happing to me to.

Continue the story and please post more pictures

Hello, i know you know who this is since we talk all the time,the master that has you drooling and wanting to be at me feet, figured i had better read your storys to see if your really ready for it to begin,

This was one of the best stories ive ever read. you MUST make a part 2!

Did you not ever learn to spell? This piece might be nice, but your horrible spelling and use of language pretty much ruins it.

Please be well

yes, i concur, great story and ppremise, but spelling, punctuation and rhythm are bad...slow down, and take your time...writing is, and should be a pleasure to do.!!

Great start, lots of potential for this story.

Two (minor) problems:

1. The sex felt very rushed and boring. He puts her in the missionary position and fucks her like that for half an hour? She must have been bored because so was I.

2. Some grammar errors. Look up the rules for "there", "their" and "they're", read through your stories before posting and find an editor.

I like the start vary imaginative hope you keep it up

Bakwass