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point of view
The contents of the story itself - S&M, oral, anal etc - was great ... variety without going overboard. Was a little odd to start off from the girl's point of view with the man as a background character, then switch to his viewpoint with the dom as the background character.
I was a little confused with the dom heading off to a bath after Ian came in her ... it didn't seem like she came, so not sure why she would leave the other 2 alone ....
Some hot ideas,
but I got confused fairly early on. It is unclear on whose point of view you are focusing, and who plays which role in the situation. Clearly you are going for a dom/sub scenario, but the switching of POV makes it hard to follow. I liked the ideas, though.
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