Making Amends Ch. 03

Better than most!

For some reason, folks here don't like dealing with stories where the people involved actually have to pay consequences for their actions. But this was one where everyone pays in one form or another. I really like that. I know that you will get more comments about this, mostly that he should have killed her, (which I probably would have done) or that he was getting bent out of shape about nothing. Either way you can't win except to keep one writing! :-)

I am not sure

I am not sure I like the ending. Does he leave? Does he stay? Can he work through it? There are so many unanswered questions. I hope there is a part 4. I waited anxiously for this part and now I have more questions than answers.

YOU CARRIED US THRU ALL THAT B/S FOR WHAT

YOU LET JIM AND THE BOYS GET AWAY CLEAN.HOW YOU LET WIFE AND SON SUFFER AND NOT JIM AND THE BOYS.WHAT KIND OF WIMPING OUT IS THAT,FIGHT FOR SOMETHING IF NOT SELF RESPECT.

wrong revenge

I find this chapter even more depressing than the previous ones. Granted, wife was incredibly stupid and got carried away with her so called revenge . But, in the opinion of almost all of your readers, the most despicable, culpable parties in this whole fiasco are the husbands former "friends" and co-workers. Why is husband not blaming them for their viciousness instead of wife for her stupidity. Husband, at this point , appears more stupid than wife. When is he going to kick the shit out of his former boss and his fellow rapists?--Or is the writer one of those who loves humiliating all parties? The story went rapidly downhill in this chapter --digusting writing. 60 year old George

They even mock......

him at work and no revenge. Come on now.

Realistic if not sweet

This chapter was more possible and real than any other you have posted that I have read. Love, betrayal, and forgiveness are not simple emotions. I suspect you may have another chapter or two in this saga. It was human and sad and believable.

If there is one thing I can't stand

it is lame arsed wimp men.
This story had the hallmarks of a dickless male story all the way through, but I kept hoping you would give him some balls.
I am truly sorry I wasted the time reading this in false hope.

Not a good ending

You left the ending in a bad way. The ending is a downer. Maybe things like this happen in real life but giving into despair makes for a poor life or story. People think lives are linear in time they are not. They twist and turn convulse bulge contract, It's open nothing is set in stone not Fate, not Doom it's all there for the taking opportunities for Life, Revenge, and Love. Grab great big handfuls, take it by the tail and toss it. Like the old Greeks you don't give up even if Death takes you by the hand. Don't end it like that.

Jim

Conveluted Ending - Why

Be a MAN??? and Leave??? Opposing logic I'd say. You have purposely painted a depressing reaction where you allowed no real reaction to occur or be considered. Not logical or lifelike. No action against malicious boss and workers. No constructive discussion or professional counciling. Why???

The first two chapters were well written - realistically to a possible situation. The 3rd is minipulated to the poor reality of non-action or unrealistic action. Why???

Your conclusion is conveluted and unconvincing - even if there is more, the third chapter closing diluted our appreciation of you as an author - do you understand this? It wasn't cute or understandable or in keeping with the direction you created.

Re-writting the third chapter closing makes sense to me to frame a actionable 4th chapter for a better appreciation of you and the stories conclusion. Consider - Regards

Please keep writing

I saw the end on another site , the one with the epilogue. You could rewrite this and make the ending a very good one. The natural inclination of a husband should be portrayed here. The man should get even with the bastards that destroyed his marriage. Every one of them would pay dearly. Just like Jim told Sally, "My wife would take me to the cleaners" Everyone of these rotten bastards would pay severely and the husband wouldn't go to jail for assault or murder either.

Also, you didn't convey to the reader a clue why these co-workers hated Bill so much. I mean, these bastards must have really had it in for Bill.

The marriage is salvagable and could even be stronger, but only after Bill has exacted several pounds of flesh from his former co-workers.

Really good writing. I enjoyed it. But the story ending, as it is posted at SOL sucks as far as the way it ends with no retribution whatsoever for these rotten bastards. By changing that end, you have the opportunity to make a good story great.

give the author some consideration

If there is one thing that irritates me, is the fact that you all tear an authors story apart for the wrong reasons, why? so what if it didn't end the way you wanted it to end, whose story is it anyway? the authors or yours? did any of you try to write a story? if you have you know it isn't as easy as you may think. give this man a break. It is a believable story no matter what our personal feelings are toward the characters. One doesn't always seek revenge or hate, each person deals with a situation as they see fit, wrong or right. Let's face the facts, the story is well written.
Not all men are macho and handle situation as you might like them to be handled, give the author a chance, I think he is not through with this story yet. Who knows ,it may end to everybodys satisfaction. Enough said. Thanks for good reading Headhuntertales. Well done.

Be the Man, Bill !!!

Bill needs to be a man and take care of business and not leave. He and Sally both need to take care of those men. I hope Bill can be the man finally.

i agree

In this story you wimped out. Him leaving his wife. him leaving work after the way his so called friends did him with no revenge. Him not doing anything at all to them. At least heshould tell their wives or better yet as part of his wifes punishment make her tell the wives why her hubby left the company. I agree though if he can't exact some revenge on his former co-workers he and his wife will never get back together.Maybe his wife should tell the other wives, throw out all her former clothes, and get a new wardrobe as well as change her hair color and get a new hair style. something so it won't remind him of her infidelity.I also think she needs tobring him home a nice woman to fuck better yet,maybe two or three so then all will be equal in their relationship again. I agree with a lot of the others it started out as a good concept and you totally wimped out. I myself no , no man who would put up with this the wayit is written. he has to have payback to make this marriage work again. The kid deservesto have parents if at all possible not just one parent. And if that is so he deserves to be that parent, not her. Somewhere in this world there has to be some justice, or else you lose confidence in right and wrong. What his Boss, Did i say boss and co-workers did was so wrong that it demands justice for all the little people, or otherwise all of us will lose confidence in what is right and wrong. Please fix this or ask another writer to do it for you if you yourself are unable to.Waiting one more time before I give up on this. Jim most of all deserves to have his marriage hurt also along wit hthe others if possible. Hurt them as I myself feel betrayed by this version of ineptitude. As they say if at first you don't succeed tr ytry again till you get it right,if you are capable at all of getting it right.Don't wimp out yourself.You can still make this right

Making Amends - Not

He was not being a man. He was giving up. Like he gave up getting payback on his boss and friends. Being a man means you stay and stand. Being a man means you get help. Professional not that Jerry Springer bullshit. Being a man means you forgive her and work through both your pains. You wimped him out just went around the other way to do it.

somethings changed

i recall reading this story many years ago.the very end was different,almost as if the author was making it a spoof that time. this ending is much better although sadder.

i also have had it with wimp husband stories, but by the same token how realistic would it be for Bill to go running into the office carring machetes and machine guns?

life's a bitch and you don't always get retribution. sometimes it takes a while.

it would have been nice to see husband and wife work it out but life doesn't always work out that way. in real life this would be a real craphouse full of issues to wade through!!

(maybe the author has another chapter or two for this story.lots of potential)
don

story/ending needs fixing

Jim's wife would take him to the cleaners. He proudly mocks Bill at the office for what he has done. Why? With everything he has to lose, he should deny, deny, deny. He's seen them on TV. How does he know it wasn't taped? They probably can't be prosecuted for rape, but sexual assault is possible. Their marriages will all be over if it's found out. They will all lose their jobs. Why do they persist? It doesn't make sense from a character motivation point of view. It seems like it is just done to move a story forward without any realism.

Is Bill stupid enough not to consider telling the wives? Could it possibly not have occurred to him. Given that everyone where he worked knows, it's not like he's trying to protect his or his wife's reputation - they are gone. Since he doesn't appear to be that dumb, why doesn't he at least consider it, even if he is going to reject it for some reason?

If she doesn't know what happened, why doesn't he tell her? She knows he was driven out of his job and she knows how she felt physically afterwards. Why doesn't he fill in the details? Is it because he loves her too much to make her suffer? But she isn't going to suffer from her presence making him physically ill and his leaving her and divorcing her without talking about it? That doesn't make sense.

We don't ask that you write a story that has actions we approve of; that the results be the ones we would choose. We ask that the actions make some kind of sense. They didn't.

Never saw it coming

Whew! I never saw this ending coming, probably because this is the first emasculated husband I've read about. His attitude goes beyond that of a cuckold. You've created a character who rationalizes his lack of gonads and assumes that ESCAPING from his family is being good for his son. Incredible!
Now if this husband were leaving to go into some kind of male "rehab" or counseling, then I could buy his actions. If he left because his wife's values were incompatible with his own, that I could understand. But you're making him sound as if he's being noble by running away.
I must assume that you have a chapter 4 in process, if not, then I've grossly overrated this one. But given the mindset you gave this man at the end of chapter 3 I almost cringe imagining what his possible actions in some hypothetical chapter 4 might be.

The end?

I don't think so. At keast, it shouldn't be. He still has to exact revenge on the four 'friends", somehow. If he does NOTHING besides telling Jims wife about it it is better than nothing.

Pathetic

If that is the best ending you can provide I suggest you have other writers submit endings. Man where's your backbone....?

sally finally understands

BILL FINALLY TELL Sally all of the things that happened that night also adz her on all the things JIM HAD SAID TO HIM AT THE OFFICE AND HOW HARD IT WAS TO BE ALROUND PEOPLE AND COWORKER WHEN YOUR WIFE HAS FUCKED THEM ALL.MAYBE SHE CAN UNDERSTAND WHEN HE DESCRIBES IT TO HER...I WOULD LIKE AND SHORT ENDING OR EPILOGUE ON SALLY THOUGHTS AND FEELING.THX MUCH FOR A GREAT STORY.ERNESTO242444

Mixed Bag

Although you did a good job of showing the pain and heartache slowly tearing them apart, the Husband's lack of balls is really dragging the story downhill. He needs to get back at his exfriends, something that will knock them down a notch or two. He needs to stick it out with his family, leaving is not the answer. REAL men don't leave their wives and children, that's a pussy's way of handling things.

One thing that was very good was the wife learned she couldn't just gloss over his hurt with sex. She needs to accept blame for what she did, WITHOUT any excuses! That would go a long way toward healing their marriage. Overall, this is a very good story, but give the husband some gonads.

Two sides...

What I like:
The feelings that are expressed here are good.

What I hate:
Bill not confronting his boss & coworkers, or do something about it. Bill not taking steps to heal his marriage, and instead running away from it.

reality

In this type of situation this is possibility how things could end. But through all this you have showed Bill as loving her and continuing to love her. If you wanted this type of ending why did Bill hang around I would have been gone the next morning. I don't feel this chapter fits how the story has gone up to this point. Wont you Please read your first chapters and give us an ending that fits, Bill is no wimp he dose love his wife, should they get through this and as a loving couple put alittle hurt on Bill's ex boss and ex friends. you set the tone of a very good story now make a great ending.

That's it?

That's the big confrontation with his boss and co-workers, a smashed computer and an "I quit."

One of the first comments stated, "For some reason, folks here don't like dealing with stories where the people involved actually have to pay consequences for their actions. But this was one where everyone pays in one form or another." Oh really, how did Jim and the rest pay? The only ones who paid were Bill and Sally.

The first two chapters were this big build up, which resulted in "eh."

I am hoping for another chapter

One where he regains his manhood, discovers that there are people called counselors that would help him with the pain. His wife is trying, why doesn't he?

He definitely should inform the wives of the assholes he used to work with about their involvment.

It can't end here!

I hope the next chapter has Bill getting even with his
former coworkers.

More to come

I read the original story on the Darkwanderer web site and I know there is more to come. You are about 1/3 to 1/2 complete. You have done an excellent job of filling in a lot of gaps and have held true to the original. I sincerely hope you will finish this story. Please do finish!

Revenge

REVENGE against those 4 mother-fuckers. DESTROY there personal and work lives.........Thats the only way to get over this...

Be a MAN ?

Be a MAN? You mean like when you threw down your toy (computer) and ran away from your playground (office)? That kind of man? Time to stop boo-hooing and start fixing things.

Thus Far -- Wussy Man!!

Well, Bill certainly has proven himself to be a wimp. He wimped out with his former boss and co-workers. God, I hope things change so you can be a man for a change.

That's it..He tells his boss that he quits and tha

if he ever catches him around his wife he'll kill him. I would have beated Jim to a pulp and then his co worker jerks and I would have tols their wives. I would have taken the tape from the videp and shown it to everyone of them. Have you no shame as a man..no prode that you let the co conspirartors get off scott free...You are a big dissapointment.

pisspoor

Is there something in the water that turns men into wimps?
Or is that the authors of the current bunch of crap floating around here were never born with any balls at all?

Oh boy if thats getting even with his coworkers

then I'll fuck his wife and mother and even dig his great grandmothers body up from the grave and piss on it. What kind of a creep is he..he let his so called friends at work get him in trouble and then humiliate him. He must love humility. I woudld have not waited for work before getting even with the assholes. i would have been on a vengence kick right after I got free. You are such a dissapointment as a writer.

Finally he starts to be a man, a grown man.

As soon as he said it he knew he shouldnt have. Actually he should have sat here down and told her the things she had done. Then walked out and taken the son with him. She is an unfit mother. Anyone that would act in the capacity and consume that much alcohol is an unfit mother. Wouldnt hurt for her to have her head tested also. No one in their right mind would touch her ever again knowing what she had done. If she really thought she had been raped where is the police report? You dont call three men over in the night and entertain them in your nicest bed lingerie without intending to have sex!

No good

Bill is a jerk so I rated it 2**

So DWornock, you find it acceptable for the wife to have sex with 4 guys because the husband saw a stripper? YOU ARE SICK!!!

If that slut Sally wantsto make amends she should do bill and her son a favor ankill herself. I say her son because with the way she willingly spread her legs there is no telling whose son it is.

IT SHOULD BE FULL STEAM AHEAD

dam the torpedoes of friends. TK U MLJ LV NV

If there is ever a time for Revenge this would be it.

Think of revenge as therapy and as a learning experience. A lot of negative reinforcement would teach his ex-friends that their behavior was unacceptable .

check your text

"TELL ME I HAVE SOME DESEASE"

WTF is a "DESEASE"?!? Jesus Christ, edit your copy!!!

I don't understand what is there to work out....

I don't understand why he isn't at his lawyers office filing for divorce & sueing his four ex-co-workers & ruining their marriages. The husband needs to man the fuck up & stop crying like a little bitch. He cheated on his wife by getting a blow job, what the wife did was 600 times worst than what he did. How does her fucking & sucking four of his co-workers compare to his blow job?! So again why isn't he divorcing her dirty ass? When he confessed his infidelity she had two options, divorce or forgiveness, a "revenge gang bang" wasn't an option, if she felt that she couldn't forgive him then she should've kicked him out of the house & filed for divorce, but instead she hand cuffed him to the bed & had him watch her suck & fuck people he went to work with, didn't she realized that was going to be humiliating & embarrassing to have to see the smirks & hear the snide remarks when he went into work? No I think she knew exactly what she was doing, she wanted to humiliate him, also these four men have wives, didn't she think about their wives & how they'd feel knowing their husbands fucked her? What a selfish self centered, moronic slut he married. How could any woman who truly loves & respect her husband do what this gutter slut wife did?! He might've cheated on her but he didn't tie her up & make her watch him getting a blow job, why did she feel she had to pull off a gang bang in order to forgive his moment of weakness? Her actions proves that she's a vindictive bitch. Not once did she consider her son & that her actions might cause them to divorce. Not once did she think about those four wives who like her son were innocent pawns in her little sick revenge... I really can't fathom why this gutless husband is trying to stay married to this cum slut. The husband is weak! He should've kicked his co-workers ass or sued the shit out of them instead of ruining away like a scared little boy--no wonder his wife has no respect for him. He needs to stand up & kick the bitch to the curb there's nothing to think about, he might've cause a crack in his marriage but she took a bulldozer to the marriage. I understand he doesn't want his son to be raised in a "broken" home but I think in the long run he'd be better off, kids aren't stupid they know more than what we adults think they do, growing up in a home where his parents are more like roommates isn't healthy. There's nothing wrong with being raised by a single parent, kids don't grow up smarter or any of that other mindless bullshit people seem to think when thinking about divorces. I think it's absolutely ridiculous to stay in a marriage because of Children, parents are suppose to be role models for their kids, staying in a hazardous relationship isn't teaching them anything. At the end you'll lose their respect & they'd feel like they're to blame for their parents staying together. If this husband wants to stay married to his dirty whore ... More power to him, I really don't see how that could possibly work, but he has to want to stay cause he loves her not just because he doesn't want his son raised in a "broken" home. She has no respect for him & if he has any respect for himself he'd dump the bitch before the cum had a chance to dry.

Ok its fucking official! This author is the biggest pussy ever to write on Literotica!!! I mean really you fucking loser grow a pair! Also, you need to learn the difference between loser and looser! Moron!!!

Alright

About time he left. Now time to plan the revenge and to destroy his co=workers lives as his was destroyed. We'll see...

not "alright"

Being a betrayed cuck and haunting the cheating wife section of a sex story site does not make you a "hard man" - it makes you a no-life loser cuck without balls who gets laughed at because his fetish is obvious to everyone except him.

Nope..

You don't quit your job. You walk in the door with a machete and then into each and everyone of those SOB's offices, one at a time, leaving with their heads. Either one would do. You don't quit and leave.

Junk

So far the best thing the cuck could do is to castrate himself and then slit his throat.

Yeah, you do quit and leave for a better job

Then some unidentified person attacks the SOBs with the machete while you are playing poker with three or four of your best friends who are prepared to tell the cops you were never out of their sight the entire time.

Not Very Good

It started off pretty interesting but the story quality is going downhill fast. I'll try one more chapter.

Don't know if

we were ever told if the camera made a tape/disc of if it was merely a TV feed. If it was a tape or disc, had she watched it?

OUCH

Boy this is one f---ed up story....The natural response would be to go after the 4 men!
Tell me there was a video in that bedroom TV that was recording?