All Comments on 'Pony, Introduced Pt. 01'

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A few issues. If her arms are tethered to her neck, how did he get her shirt and bra off without cutting them?

The hitch thingie being forced as it was makes me fearful of tearing her. I personally know of this happening.

I liked that she considered her safeword, but how would she have given it with the bit gag? His clinical sadism was a bit much for my preference. It would have helped to see him checking on her physically and emotionally. Other than one flash of something in his eyes, it's difficult to feel he cares about HER. He seems to only be focused on his goal. More about the relationship flavors the action. The stop point was abrupt. Sorry for the nitpicking and not everyone will agree with me. Looking forward to more of their story.