All Comments on 'After her Bachelorette Party'

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Ijustmight71Ijustmight71about 6 years ago
Nice taboo fuck

Loved the plot. Made me hard

redlion75redlion75about 6 years ago
Too bad

She is on the pill and didn't get knocked up............yet

horny2doithorny2doitabout 6 years ago

This story is so hot ....Yes hopefully they will go at it again when they get home and his horny sister will let him do her even after she gets married. Sober, I'll bet she can give him a run for his money as they say. Great start and we need more please. More details. Thanks.

dutch513nelsdutch513nelsabout 6 years ago
Good Story

That was a great short story ,fun read thank you. Gave it 5 stars

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Spoiled by the crap about the pill

He should have just pushed is cock in as deep as it would go and shot his cum deep up inside her unprotected pussy

This is story land no VD or babies

Turtle1952Turtle1952about 6 years ago
More please

Hot sexy story, please keep going. Do they enjoy each other so much she calls the wedding off or do they keep fucking after she is married? Pregnant, who is the daddy?

Rt3FarmerRedFordRt3FarmerRedFordabout 6 years ago
LOVED IT !!!!!!

Your story stimulated me enough to call my three sisters and ask when they were CUMMING to visit.

THANK YOU,

DJB

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Nice

Nice little story. Would have been even better with some girl girl action at the party. You just know it happened. Not bad.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
"molten cum."

As opposed to? Solid cum?

Robinius1Robinius1about 6 years ago
Nice Story!

I wonder what happens when she sobers up. Does she regret fucking her brother? Does she feel guilty and confess to her fiancee that she fucked another man? Does the fiancee call off the wedding? Does her brother comfort her? Does she realize that her fiancee's cock is too small and only her brother can satisfy her now?

Your story begs a sequel. If you don't write one I'll have to put my imagination to use.

Thank you!

kaidmankaidmanabout 6 years ago
dynamite short

I'd love to see where this goes good work every one of your stories are excellent

to anon below "molten" in this context is used to convey that the cum was hot temperature wise it is often used to describe sperm that is hotter than the body parts it landed on or inside

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
I agree....

Let Michael cum inside his sister's pussy... and give a good description sexy Michael. A good-size pubic bush? treasure trail? a bit of chest hair for the young muscular chest? Are they ready for round two?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
get a new editor

In the intro you thank someone for editing - don't, find someone else. This story could be great but it's too poorly written. Take a class or two and or find an editor that actually has language skills.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

she's a whore right away. I stopped reading before they got to the freeway! Same old tired stories being rehashed. Why are they always trash with no class? So what if she didn't fuck him. She had some strangers dick all over her. The reality is who knows how many diseases he has on the thing. And now she can have genital warts on her lips thanks to strange cock on her face.

I would dump my wife if I found out about shit like that. And I would expect the same from her.

Not original at all

ScottishTexanScottishTexanover 1 year ago

So you mentioned that Candace is your editor? 🤔 I recommend that you fire her. I counted at least twenty grammatical errors, misspellings, and typographical errors before I gave up keeping track. For example, one of the very first was:

> making last minute arraignments <

"arrangements" Britney wasn't headed to a courtroom! I would certainly hate to see what your story looked like before Candace edited it, if she actually did lift a finger to check over it. She certainly wasn't thorough.

The story has potential to be a whole lot better if more effort and hard work was done. But unfortunately, I was disappointed. 😞 I see that there's a link to the next installment, so I'll read on. I honestly hope that it gets better. 2/5

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