by EenViezeVent
A...This will be practical to help them survive.
B...If you want to add a magical element. An ancient entity could be manipulating events.
Of course I have to go for option B, nothing better than a some creepy old ruins to spur some sibling lovin'.
Stumbling onto a curse that reveals their desires toward each other could be interesting.
I'm going to take option A. It will give them more useful items, and maybe clues as to the mystery of how they found themselves there in the first place.
This is a bit of a mystery so far but I hope you will keep my interest
5 stars so far
The parents did it. The parents are siblings too. They want their kids to succumb to the emotions they have been fighting.
Both A and B allow for an antagonist to create tension, and that tension to become sexual. That said, I think A is less corny, but B has the potential to be bothm better or worse.
The Siblings should move though the undergrowth and find a clearing with the shelter but it shouldn't be pristine, it should show signs of struggle and be located on a small fresh water pond.
Good start. Option B is my choice. Looking forward to either one though.
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Maybe show signs of a struggle, it would make their resolve to stick together even greater
Option A: would draw attention to previous captors, indicating a stay long enough to build semi-permanent living quarters.
Option B: goes even further into the obscure implying an ancient lost civilization.
Why would someone on board the cruise ship select the siblings for conflicting evaluation?
Option C: None of the Above.
imho, write your own story, don't trickerate or manipulate the reader to generate points for comments.
A.........Please make each section longer. You just get into it and the its over. Thanks!
Great start hope you go into detail on why she was angry towards her brother. Choice B
And the island needs to have pirates, that will bring the siblings even closer together.
Both are really good out comes I would not mind seeing a little bit of both would be fun. My choice would be A.
The reason that she changed is because she started fantasizing about her little bro. Incest is wrong but she can't help herself, so she tries to be away from him. The incest angle is already there just not apparent yet. Oh well, what do I know? You are the author.
i think this is a plan done by the parents to get them to "Team work" problems together and they hired someone to help them hence crate (if they were hired to help out that means "A" is a client they helped out before? so i go with "B"
"B" is my final answer!
A if we are to get a gradual, self contained story without magic
B if one moves to sex quickly and wants to expand their influence on others after rescue by authorities. Parents later get memorized by the magic one at a time.
I really like the concept of choose your adventure and you have a writing style I enjoy. I went with A because I thought there was a story chance to drop clues that their parents aren't who they seem to be.
“B” will add some mystery to their adventure. I also believe that sister might have some unspoken feelings for her brother and that has been her problem since he turned eighteen.
It really depends on how long the story is meant to be.
If you only intended for like 3 or 4 chapters where the siblings simply reconnect the love they used to have then option A is the best one.
However, if you were intended to really give this story some legs to where the siblings reconnect but also there's alot of other things going in there world, like supernatural ruins or something then option B is the winner.
Personally as a reader, I prefer stories that are REALLY fleshed out, that have many layers and explore all the different angles the author setups.
So I think as a reader, I would get more enjoyment out of option B, but I realize that makes more work for you.
P.S. This idea of asking the audience was absolutely brilliant. A real game-changer. Bravo!!!!
With no background on the people that spotted them on the boat or how they knew 1 of the kids isn't gay or how they got 2 unconscious people of the boat unnoticed leaves a lot of wholes.i never see a story with 1 of the "victims" is gay a totally fucks the kidnappers plans.