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Fun poem!
The light-hearted humor wonderfully contrasts the formal structure. Well done, Spike!
villanelle
I thought about trying to write one of those too
but I don't like mine, I loved yours
love the beach play, hehehey! nice~
LOL
I think you're right, Boo bested you with this form.
But I'm giving you a 5 anyhow; it's a damned hard form to do well. I've never succeeded with it.
And, well, there was some really nice stuff here.
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you just make me wanna jump in the car and head for the coast, thank you, this is a wonderful. bouyant diversion ;)
Loved this
You worked this really well. I've done a couple myself using repetition, and loved the rhythm of yours.
Great job. ;-)
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The form, the scene, spot on.
Form's done so well that the scene flows seamlessly, strengthening both.
Beach Scene
Spending time at the beach and writing about it ~ not the worst way to go.
BLUE WATER BECKONS
far out to sea. TK U MLJ LV NV
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