however, this would've been soooooo much better had you written the story in a past tense. it would've read better i think. also, next time you write a group-sex story, it'll help if you give a good description of everybody involved so that the reader can really picture things easily and get your characters to stand out.
loved it so much i came to it and this is one of my fantasies is to have this acted out please feel free to contact me anytime
...that was hot
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