All Comments on 'The Orgy'

Oh really !!

The idea had lots of potential. The actual presentation was awful. But again, good idea, so keep trying. Practice makes perfect.

"They stood around the room with their smooth, bare chests and penises standing hard and erect."

Their chests were erect?

"Robert feels someone grab his hard dick into a slowly enters her hole."

That makes no sense whatsoever.

And that's just the beginning.

Far too short, not enough substance

How old are you. 10? How in the fuck is this revenge. Give it up. U suck as a writer.

As usual 1 star is too many.

DRAGONRIDER55

This has lots of potential. But it also needs a lot of work. I would recommend you keep writing. And then write more. Ignore the quit writing you suck comments. Look for people who give you feed back you can use. Things like develop your characters more. Don’t rush the story. And most importantly, keep writing!