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by Anonymous

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by Reltne01/14/05

Uneven

I like the "planed"
"deplaned"
"plain"
play
and the pale stranger in reflection is nicely done.

However, I do not feel that the final two lines are up to your normal standard. Stating that it is a mirrored image makes everything too obvious, and "mirror'll" is just not you!

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by Tathagata01/14/05

your poem

has been mentioned in todays reviews

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