All Comments on 'White snowfield unfinished'

till melted, loved the concept of

your poem~ forever changing, the only

thing constant is change!

witty word wizard~

nice poetry~

And I'm not sure if I'm understanding this in spots. There are sections which imply "dissolving", e.g. melting of the snow and ice, which would imply the temporal quality of the seasons, nature's renewal, etc. Yet, you state "white snowfields forever." If they are forever, there can be no interruption, and now there is the implication of the polar ice caps, permafrost, etc. You can't have it both ways....either the poem paints an interesting picture of the snow and ice melting in Spring, only to come back in Fall (Virgo Immaculata ascending and descending?), or indeed the snow and ice is eternal, without interruption.(the last line would support that theory) Whatever the case, the distinction is not made clear here. Also, I believe there is a missing "s" in "crystalline" and you might want to put "Poincare Conjecture" on the same line, since otherwise the "conjecture" might be associated with something you wrote earlier. I also don't see the need for the "cacophony" statement. You haven't been describing "cacophony" at all, just a gentle cycle of snow/ice melting....snow/ice being created. The only cacophony was in the frantic word play, but I don't think you meant that. All told, an extraordinary document, well worth this length of comment!