It's not bad at all. You build it up and use the framing device well. Some problems are glaring, however. "4 Ultra-Hot college guys" made me wince. It's good for what it is though, a simple X-rated short story.
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Anonymous03/17/06
more of Katie?
Where does Katie go from here? Think this character could be developed some more. Hope she shows up again & soon in new stories!
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excellent story....i loved it
the story was excellent ....a part two would be nice. Keep up the good work
Not bad, but could've been more
It's not bad at all. You build it up and use the framing device well. Some problems are glaring, however. "4 Ultra-Hot college guys" made me wince. It's good for what it is though, a simple X-rated short story.
more of Katie?
Where does Katie go from here? Think this character could be developed some more. Hope she shows up again & soon in new stories!
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