All Comments on 'WC 101: Willie and the Brain'
by Rumple Foreskin
- 22 Comments
Nightowl22over 19 years agoA good writing and story start. I do feel there's a LOT of room for more to the story but it is still good as is.
sackover 19 years agoGave this a "5" for enterprise, but it really is merely a tease to a potentially much longer story.
impressiveover 19 years agoVery lyrical prose and engaging characters. Would like to see more of them, too. ~Imp
Anonymousover 19 years agoYou truly are a talented and inspiring writer - your story was a pleasure to read. I am envious of your skills!
logophileover 19 years agoHey Rumple,
Nice story! Sweet with a real feel. I love the long pauses necessary for Willie to think things through. I have a sweet sister who talks like that - It was all so familiar!
-Logo
My Erotic Taleover 19 years agovery touching and well written~
good luck and happy lovers day
dr_mabeuseabout 19 years agoYou pulled it off well, Rump, but where's the rest? It kind of reads like a first chapter. Is there more on the way?
elfin_odalisqueabout 19 years agoDeservedly 5-bombed but it is incomplete. You've got Bertie and the Drones club, but is Etta Jeeves? If not, she has to be a 'mistake'-the girl always is.
Not sure PG would have'exited' a car park mind.
cookiejarabout 19 years agoThis is the beginning, now give us more. Your command of the English language amazes me. (In a good way) :) Good Luck!
kbateabout 19 years agoLeave me hanging! Why you rat. I'll 5 bomb you anyway, but now you have to continue!
eric shawn listoabout 19 years agoGreat writing! Loved "logic was illogical" Witty and charming. Wodehouse would be proud.
Anonymousabout 19 years ago"...The automobile in question was a dilapidated model rich in years..."
I can so relate. LOL. thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks, RG!
Anonymousabout 19 years agoThe spirit is excellent, the grammar needs a little bit of work--extra commas and such.
Nevertheless, a fun read.
neonlyteabout 19 years agoLoved the prose, certainly don't want to hear of apologies!
Well done.
impressiveabout 19 years agoYou should've warned us! Oh, wait! You did.
Nice work, Rumps. ~Imp
Anonymousabout 19 years agoBut I added one for Willie being such a great character. Was a little disappointed that there wasn't a second page of antics though.
Good work. :)
moonblademabout 19 years agoYou're absolutely right. There's no sex anywhere in this story at all. What it is, is well-written and engaging. ;)
Sylvie Champagneabout 19 years agoOutstanding! This was my favorite among all the Valentine's Day submissions. Add me to the crowd that will nag and pester you until you give us MORE!
Virtual_Burlesqueabout 19 years agoI truly loved "Willie and the Brain," because I’m a Plumhead to the core, which, as you know, is the pits.
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