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Enjoyed it
But you should edit a little more carefully. One or two spelling errors and grammatical errors. Not criticising - just pointing out that sometimes small errors can detract from a good story. Still enjoyed it, though. Will you sit under my table?
neat little story...
flowed well, just proofread a little more closely next time!
I like it.....
Yeah, may have had a couple of grammatical errors but minor. At least you remembered that every time you change POV, topic, or who is speaking it is a new paragraph! :-) some of the conversations I see here! Sheesh!
The STORY was good, and the characters flowed for me. I liked that she was able to get Marcus to let her in. I hope she amply rewarded him! So how is she getting her payback?
very nice
I like to read a story about two people who love each other so
Good idea
It was a real good surprise for a hubby. i may also try to this, though it is very risky. Love you
Liked the story!!!!
I love surprises!!
good one
i hope you come up with a good story fore part two.
Excellent
Your detail was excellent! Makes me wish you knew where I worked.
Love the story
A missing word or three, doesn't hurt the story but stops the reader for a second to find the missing phrase.
Good plot, good execution and overall a nice read.
reminds me......
my wife surprised me at work two valentines ago, it was the most memorable time i ever had. this story was a great reminder.
Good "FUCKING" Story.
I like your story. Very imaginative and strongly written. Don`t worry to much about errors. We who read for the titilation don`t give a fuck about mistakes. All we males want, and you did it to me, is to read a story that will give us a hard prick. you did that to me. Keep `em cumming Babe
John P
Translator's Bonus
I loved every word. I had to translate it for my German speaking wife, who took that as a hint to give me head during the whole proceedings! Hope she'll do it for me one day. It sure beats a red rose as a Valentine's day gift
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