All Comments on 'Just a Few Pics'

I hate to agree but its true.

I understand that you arent a pro writer here but if your going to give it a try at least get a resonable story line.

The chief of which is the fact that for doing something that isn't illegal (though maybe a little embarrassing), they are being blackmailed (which is illegal) to 1) give him more to use against them and 2) perform illegal acts, i.e., prostitution. He has more to lose than they do, especially if they can get proof that he was forcing them to go along with it. Face it, blackmail stories are inherently stupid.

another sick pile of garbage pretending to be an erotic story. Do all bi people get off on humiliation and blackmail or is it just your thing? the Ct. Yankee

All the comments are correct - this is not worth the effort to comment, EXCEPT

I have noticed that Chagrined, who has supposedly stopped writing and intends to remove his stories from this site (yet to happen, I notice) just because of a few unflattering public comments, has managed to serve up much worse to others then he ever got for any of his stories.

I just tell it the way I see it. But at least the writer I am tearing apart, with valid points mind you, had the cajones to write something. I don't see a list of submissions under your name. :-) And as I said before, I was wrong and am big enough to admit it. Just wait you will have so many of my submissions coming at you, you'll have to truck 'em out a whole new door! :-)

But you did mail people, even those who had tried to help you, demanding we delete your email address - which under those circumstances I did quite happily.

Then you show up blasting stories, as Goodwifey says, worse than I saw on any of yours.

Now you say you are submitting again.

Well, that's good. Your stories so far were okay to great, and I look forward to more.

But my comments on your stories were no less valid, and were definitely more civil, than many critiques you have since posted.

I wish you luck, and I wish you had been a bit more sensible at the start of all this...

With the limp dicked argument that you aren't qualified to comment on the stories here unless you have submitted some yourself.

What an utter load of SHIT! And you know it, but revert to the statement when you have no clue what else to say.

Maybe you can get the webmaster to allow comments only by other authors - just try.

Until then you will have to put up with uneducated asses like me posting clueless comments on your Pulitzer prize submissions.

Or quietly voting a 'one' and moving on...

AND I am proud to say I have no balls! Never needed them for anything I needed to do.

chagrined was here. you have to stop listening to music. that sucked

I have yet to read a story that cannot be improved. What other critics of this story are attempting to do I do not know. This story is in fact plausible. The author has not given us the reason why the couple would submit to blackmail, and this is indeed a weakness in the story, but it is not a fatal weakness. (Could he be running for high public office? Could she be a school teacher who would lose her job if her "moral turpitude" became public knowledge?)

Certainly the story could have been strengthened. For instance, the couple could have made it clear that there was to be no anal sex. And at the end, instead of oral sex, the blackmailer could have forced her into anal, perhaps with the husband forced to watch.

Could the couple have turned the situation around? After all, the blackmailer stole their camera. Clearly he is wealthy. Could they blackmail him?

There are many possible plot twists and enhancements. But overall, not bad!

Never mind that the guy widower down the street had a nine inch thick cock. Never mind that he had been lusting after Elizabeth for years. OH no Dufus has to go on the internet...wheeeee ( shows where his brains are) to find a safe person to fuck Elizabeth...

Then to make matters worse the dumb duo goes to Bills place knowing that he planned on blackmailing them and doesn't take even a cheap radio shack recorder. BLACKMAIL is against the law. To blackmail for sexual favors constitute rape. They could have had him arrested...BUT oh nooo..the retards want

to keep it from being found out...like he has control over what happens now...soon the entire town and the rest of the world will know how idiot they are and that she sucks and fucks strangers...Maybe the old guy down the street will still have his chance ...but who really wants to fcuk a mental retard? Then they are only as stupid as their creator...YOU IDIOT..

The story sucked; made it's way through the stages, from who knows what is going on to spineless wimp of a husband. I don't find confusion, idiocy, or wimps erotic.

Another loser author it must have taken you a minute to write and think this crap up.

Another loser author it must have taken you a minute to write and think this crap up.

kill yourself you fag and quite writing

More please....

to willing cuckold with the click of a shutter flash

Not sure if this is plain trash or ridiculous trash.

Another gay faggot trying to write posing as a hereto male!! Why are u ashamed to be gay? Go ahead suck all the cocks want...it’s a feee world!

If u love wearing panties do so!!

This was definately written by a teen gay faggot!

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Cuck story.

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