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Chills
I was gripped from the first word to the last. Amazing.
wow...
hot, passionate and oh so very, very sad. Loved it but it might just be me but the very first sentance didin't seem to flow quite right. The rest- perfect.
Great guns!
You really know how to build it up, with sensitivity and detail. But you may even consider moving beyond the restictions of erotica into mainstream wrting- short stories at least. There's a bit of the D.H.Lawrence touch to your writing. Refer to his short story " The White Stocking ".
Really a major departure from the filth that most net based erotic literature is...you have got flow and style
Wow.
That was amazing. I usually hate power play, but that was written so well, making it so clear that she was controlling him just as much as he was controlling her... and such a mundanely tragic ending that makes it very realistic.
Wonderful
Full of powerful emotions, whether or not we like what we feel. This story made me think of Star Girl. Sweet and sad. But so very real.
I'm happy to see a new story from you. It's been a while. I've missed your beautiful compositions.
Dear dr_
Such a change from most Valentine stories but I'm sure it strikes a chord in many of your readers. As always, your work is flawless. I left this story with my emotions in a jumble, a testamant to your writing.
This ...
"He filled her completely, not only her cunt but her mind and her awareness" ... is what makes your sex scenes so incredible. That line will stay with me for a while. Thanks, Zoot! ~Imp
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This story leaves me wanting, and at the same time thankful that there isn't more.
Perfect just as it is.
Nicely done, Dr M
You have perfectly captured the push-pull of addictive love in words that more than often elude. Thank you for this dark and poignant piece...
Terrific story!!
Well thought out and written. Neely's personality and situation made it easy for me to understand her need and desire to be bound and whipped. I particularly liked the ending, the spinning Eros. Perfect.
Another Fine Dr. Mabeuse Production
Even by your standards, which are high, this was a good piece of writing and a great job of characterization with Neely.
Another fine delivery!
As usual Dr_Mabeuse has delivered a scorching tale of passion and need in a most original and mesmerizing way. Very few authors could combine hearts and love paraphernalia in a BDSM theme and get away with it, but he just makes it look so easy and feel so damn good! Well done Doc!
J
She needs to tell her husband that
1. She has no interest in children now or later
2. She has an old time lover that she still sees
3. She is unfaithful and needs a divorce
4. She really does not love her husband, he is really just temporary lodging with inn a well to do setting
5. She has no long term plans for him
Brave New World?
Heehee, it is what it reminded me of. The ending. I adore your style of writing. I feel your character's passion.
Why do people take everything so seriously?
It's a story. The character doesn't have to tell her husband anything. It is FICTION.
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