All Comments on 'Band Geeks'

This story reads like a teenage fantasy of how a girl should respond to a guy dropping his pants. Very unreal. Using words like vagina (heaps) is a bit repedative and ferocity (twice) shows you wanted to use this word when really not warranted. But please keep writing, the story was good enough to read to the end. Get someone to proof read, not just spelling and grammar but also appropriate use of certain words. Again, looking forward to more.