by obsidianalligator2
Your writing is excellent. I look forward to more stories feom you. Only thing i might suggest would be to have an overall plot...but just the life of a new teenager in a new school is a plot and i believe you have made it interesting as well as incredibly sexy.
I know there is a Chapter 6, I am going to read it shortly...
Author, you need to learn the difference between "there" and "their", plus a few other grammar issues. You said you are working on other stories at the end of Chapter 5; I REALLY hope you have received some assistance with your writing.
I have a great appreciation for this story, I am enjoying reading this nasty story-you are really doing great with it. Would really like to see more than one more chapter out of this...YeeHaw!!