The Ultimate Revenge

A very good story of how revenge backfires!!!

When a spose cheats in a marriage the relationship is over. Then to revenge cheat just kills any chance of any type of new relationship developing. This story shows how revenge usually does not go as planned. You have written avery different type of ending for this story. Please keep these very good stories comming.

Think about it...

An interesting 'take' on an age-old problem. Do I sense a lesson in here somewhere?

I wonder: How often does the act of revenge go as intended? How often are the desired results really achived? What's the percentage of couples that remain together after one has cheated and the other has had revenge?

It seems to me that if a couple were to try to stay togrther, wouldn't it be harder to repair the damage of two wrongs.

A good story, RP. Thank you for a thought-provoking tale.

Different, yes

Would I save it and read it again - no.
The first 95% of the story was so stereotyed I almost stopped reading. Almost - any other author and I would have stopped without finishing it.
That's what it is like, but I knew there would be a twist - then the candle dropped, and so did the penny.
Sorry, far, far, far from your best.

Favourite author - but!

You are one of the best authors on the site. However, I had problems with this story. Firstly, in the set-up I thought I was re-reading 'Making Amends' by mistake, the plot was so similar. Secondly, this was obviously a very bad experience for the husband but for the wife it was a total emotional disaster. He has the 'benefit' of being out of it. She has to live with the fact that her absurd over-reaction to his initial misdemeanour, and her chosen means of revenge, actually killed her husband and to deal with both her own feelings about this and those of her friends and relations. This is the kind of scenario which would make it difficult to see a way forward for most people, but you give us very little indication of how she is dealing with this mentally.

Apart from this, your message that revenge is a dangerous process which often spirals out of control is well taken. I look forward to your next story (or a conclusion to your much lighter 'Superman or Clark Kent' tale, if, indeed, there is more to come!).

LOVING?? wives

I QUIT READING WHEN THE FIRE STARTED....IT WAS JUST TOO SICK FOR ME. THIS BELONGS IN A GROUP KNOWN AS VENGEFUL WIVES AND MURDERERS....HATED IT. BACK TO THE DRAWING BOARD.

been there done that

it's copycat of two other stories, this one ended up bad but just change the names and you have "Hildy".

Realism

This story wasn't especially erotic, but very thought provoking. The stories in here so often show little or no consequences for actions that range from unacceptable to dangerous. This simply indicates how things can go wrong, and is more likely than four housewives wanting to sleep with a man to get revenge on a cheating husband. Well done.

RP What the hell were you thinking?!

...when you wrote this? Since we are compartiots I will be a little harsher. This should have been fleshed out a little more and submitted as an alternative ending to Hildy. I know you would never intentionally rip off anothers plot so what I think we are seeing here was the way Hildy could have (and probably should have LOL!) ended. (Actually, I thought so too. I remember during the tie up scence thinking, What if there is a fire , you stupid bitch?) You're writing seemed a bit more rushed also. You are a damn good wordsmith and have shown it on many occasions. Not as obvious here. I can see you wanted to make a point on the old adage "When one plans on revenge, first you dig two graves" idea but it was just too rushed. Please go back, and redo the theme, because no one can do that theme better than you!

To be fair, I thought you might have been pandering to the unwashed masses out there in LitLand. Keep doing what you do best and you will continue to be one of the best writers out there!

And to the others commenters on the backfiring revenge theme: I disagree that revenge often backfires. I habitually engage in it as do many folks right here in Lit Land and it always works for me! :-)

Give your soul to the Lord because your ASS IS MINE! lol1

Shawn

Strikingly similar

to Making amends. No, the woman in the story could not have ever suffered enough for what she did. (Candles to make the setting more romantic?) She wanted to fuck the guy, not make him propose to her. Weak plot building.

I am not going to be as harsh on you as the other folks here. I love your stories. Your plot building on this one was weak. A little more time on this element of the story would have contributed greatly to it's acceptance. I guess you needed the fire for killing Doug, but a twist would have been the baby died in the fire and Doug was able to free himself, or another scenario, she is given life or even the death penalty for the murder. Her husband, after all, had been tied up and that alone would indicate a certain amount of premedidation on her part. The motive of course, revenge.

Gary

awesome writing

Thanks rpsuch for writing something and letting us know the consquences of one of the things that can happen in those bondages situations. We have read many chapters, where the husband, wife or lover tie up one or the other for fun, punishment, or non-consensual relations. In many cases those persons are left to defecate, urinate, choke, cry have the urge to scatch, or turn over to change positions. Those persons who use this method for punishnment in many cases don't give damn. None of these persons are doctors and maybe not know what conditions a strain this kind of restrictioin on a person. Yet we just read of a tragic event

Doesnt float my boat:

I cant be critical as others have, for the simple reason my feelings deal with prefrence and not your abilities. I personally do not care for the negative theme in my escapism. I also realize that in real life much is not positive. I also realize that revenge is at best useless, better to turn the page with life and get on with it. The story was very good, it has moral values and an intelligent well thought out plot. Lastly even though all the above is true, my boat did not float, yet the ocean floats many differen't types. Good job, yet would love a part two to Clark Kent or Superman? Oh and always Thank You.

It is with much "chagrin" that I aplogise!

Having spoken with the author (yes we do sometimes swap ideas and views!) I have to revise what I said. This, when one doesn't have his head up his ass as I did when I read it, is actually pretty good satire of a story we all know and some of us are trying to forget. Soooo

RPsuch, my apologies!

Chagrined

Disturbing.

The more likely response from a wife in this situation would be to get pissed off and burn dinner, not go screw some slug.
So believeable was lost right off the bat.
Consequence? There always is one. Always.

Not your best effort, this needed lots more of some parts and lots less in others.

I liked this story

With many of the stories here that tie up the husband for revenge, usually the wife goes over the top getting her retaliation. This story, at least, showed what can happen when that happens.
It's not your best story, but it is still head and shoulders above most of the writings on this site. Thank you.

WTF?????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Never saw that ending coming....
*lost for words*

One Sick Story...

I suspect that you think are writing "bad ending" stories because you want to "save" people from their sinful behavior. I think you are fooling yourself-You get off on writing about the "sin" and get off even more by writing about the punishment of the "sinner". To each his own, I guess, but I wish there was a specific category for this type of sick fantasy so we could be saved the trouble of reading it.

You underline the old addage

that revenge is best served cold. It was a little confusing to read. I had to go back to pick up that the smarm had come in unannounced, and it took a moment to uncerstand you were having your heroine fantasizing when she talks about Doug doing good things to her. Also you made not attribution to the Smarm when he calls her a slut. Reading it fast, I thought she was calling herself one. While appropriate, that didn't fit, so I had to go back again to figure out where your mind was coming from.

Like Hildy, she goes over the top, unlike Hildy she was entirely sane when she did it. And I liked Chagrine's comment that he who seeks revenge need first dig two graves. I hadn't heard that one before.

And for God's sake, don't tell Melado about this.

Doug

Depraved Indifference

I have read a number of stories on this site where collateral damage is acceptable and depraved indifference would best categorize the actions of the main character. That is one reason why I liked this story.
I enjoyed it for one other reason too. This story in a sense cleans up the mess that was made by "Making Amends" which itself was a different take on the classic "Hildy". Thanks for having the guts to provide another perspective closer to reality.

Erotic story????

You must be kidding if you think this is an erotic story. What the hell happended when you were writing it. The sudden change in mood was crap.

Rampant Misandry (Hatred For Men) !!!

This is one of the most twisted pieces of fiction I've
ever read. Seriously messed up. I hate it. I hate it. I think the author is a misandrist. M-I-S-A-N-D-R-I-S-T.
That means MAN-HATER. You must be one sick and twisted person. I hope none of this is real because if it is, you will be hunted down to the ends of the earth by the police for your crime. have a nice day !!!!

Perhaps a Triffle Rushed - Only Perhaps

First of all - an extremely thoughtful scenario - yes, perhaps a rendition with a different slant - But I don't understand the sameness critisism - the closing slant stood apart. It is amazing to me to read the multiple variations of the same themes delivered on this site as well (high quality) as some of them are. After all, how many ways can a man and a women make whoope. Yet this author delivers a well written and entertaining product every time out of the gate as very few do. Are some controversial - do some require your own ending - is everyone pleased - but all are well thought out and carefully packaged.

Perhaps a triffle rushed towards the hectic end - perhaps a bit over reacted by the wife - was it his best effort - perhaps in whose judgment? - put it away RP - I liked it and look forward to your next effort.

Again, thanks for your time, effort and talents - best Regards

Absolute Crap

This story sucks, sounds like it was written by some bitter man hater. The story wasn't even sexually exciting in anyway. This doesn't even qualify as an erotic story! just a waste of time! I must admit it started off very good but then I was let down This is one twisted piece of crap story to the writer YOU ARE SICK
YOU ARE SICK
YOU ARE SICK

At last some reality

One of the best I ever read.

Some of our readers need to chill

I liked it. I expected her to rescue him, then be thankful she
did not kill him. Oh well, got me on that one.

For those of you whose collective IQ is south of your shoe
size, you need to lighten up. If you don't like it, go read
the sports section, or your shrink's latest assessment of your
intellectual capacity for tolerance of others.

As I said, I like this writer's work, and want to thank him.

Revenge!

Aother prime example::
Sex should NEVER be used for revenge!!

A good story but a hell of an ending. She really fucked up. Her revenge is proven really ridiculous and tragic.
She failed miserably in her obligations to her husband.

Through thick and thin........

revenge

this shows that in most cases revenge sex. Creates more problems and not to act with out knowing all the facts. A well written story but very sad

Over the Top!

Needed a better ending than this! You could have at least let her save him and then they make up! This end would have been better than letting him die! Oh yea and way more erotic! There was nothing erotic about this story! Period!
Sexmate

Good Ending

This story does not have the depth or length of Making Amends or Hildy, but it has a much better ending. Who could ever makeup with a vindictive faithless bitch who would treat her husband like this? The rest of his life he would see her, in his mind, with another man any time he has sex with her. He is better off dead.

Not erotic, but thought-provoking

An excellent cautionary tale. More than the drawbacks of revenge sex, which some commenters noted, warning should also be taken of the dangers inherent in bondage.

Ouch!!

Have to go along with Harddaysknight on this in that it shows how some fantasies can have horrible consequences. It's definitely a tale with an unexpected outcome; get too wrapped up in your fantasies and they'll run away from you and then..........

Infinitely Better than Hildy

I would have preferred that the baby died as a consequence of her outrageous behavior. Then he would have been around to insure that she regretted every day of her life. And we would have been able to find out if husband is a man or a wuss. Would the scumbag pay too?

Not up to rp's usual standard (too short and too little development), but this is infinitely better than Hildy. This is a fascinating genre - seemingly totall fantasy. It would be interesting to know whether this "tie up and make him watch" scenario has ever actually happened. Unlikely. With all the cheating wife stories, why do we never read about him tying her up to watch? Opps, I guess I know the answer to that one.

These cheating stories should be separated from Loving Wives into its own catagory - "Cheating".

Very nice twist.

What happenend to the baby? I hope the husband had family who could take her.
Hey, shit happens. Get the baby iout first or the husband. Safety note for future revenge wives; keep quick escape tools nearby for use in an energency.

Thanks; Good Story

I was mixed on the story

I found the story disturbing and was mixed on how I felt about it. I did think it was rushed and other stories of yours I have liked better.

A stories purpose

is to entertain: to make you laugh, to cry, to get mad, to reflect; to invoke an emotional response. This story did that!

Did I get upset at this story? No, I got upset about reading the paper this morning of a mother in SF throwing her three babies in the cold, cold bay.

Can I separate the fiction and reality in my mind, sure! If you can't, problems loom on the horizon!

The story was well written, it evoked an emotional response (sadness, anger, frustration). My reaction: I enjoyed the craft, the imagination that went into the effort.

There is probably a nice essay waiting out there on the vicarious lives people live on the internet!

Weird

Just plain weird!

Everyone loses

So very sad that some people have no real sense of proportion. Very well told story.

hmm...

bullseye! very effective.

so sad

A horror story.. She was very much out of line and her husband came out as a idiot not being able to differ between lies and reality.. Both lost their life's here.. Strong tale.. As for what is reality most of us know (with age) terrible things that we don't like to spread on to others.. the difference between what we know to be true and this story seems to me very small. In fact a story like this is a reminder of our mortality and of our responsibility towards each other.. with some trust and love intact this story most likely wouldn't have happened... Cheers Yoron.

Adulteress/Murderess

And all she got was 5 years. This takes husband humiliation to the next level, I think all male humiliation stories should be placed in their own category as they are a fetish but don't ruin the fetish category with them.

been done, but?

the concept of the revenge goes in a different direction, with tragic consequences. what price bj?
for her, something more, not sure what is needed.
henry gets off - not even an acessory to the crime ?

financial stuff

she very well may have the insurannce policies and bank accounts too. it is preferred to her escaping the daily reminder of her deed, versus suicide, wherevershe may be and with whom

only five years

the ultimate revenge would have been Life with out possibility of parole.

self-imposed suffering

The five years (realistic in the legal system) wasn't the ultimate revenge; it was a postponement of the revenge. Nobody could do anything worse to her than she was doing and going to do to herself.

She deprived herself of the most important thing in her life. She deprived him of the life he had coming and his belief in her before he died. She deprived her daughter of her father. All for a stupid, pointless, over-the-top revenge.

Think of one of those parents who forgot their baby in the locked car and the baby died. Is there any sentence that could be imposed by a court that could be remotely as harsh as the suffering resulting from what they did?

Not realistic

A man might get 5 years. She would get probation and even more so because she has a child. After all it is the man's fault so killing a husband is seldom punished much. Nevertheless, I gave it a 5.

your wrote a story that had nowhere to go..

what if there wasn't a fire? he would have had no choice but to smile at the whore as he sliced her throat... the wife's act was so utterly and completely ridulous that the story was doomed immediately... she would also have been in prison for the rest of her life.

Too late for some loathsome disease for her?

this was a dumb one

sorry.it suck.

If she so desires punishment

For starter, she could kill her baby. With that kind of mother, the baby would only grow up to be another danger to society.

Frankly, psycho like her shouldn't even reproduce.

It's a shame that her husband had only been honest and loyal to her about everything.

DWmoronic is so stupid

she orders her sushi well done

UaU

That was a truly dark tale. The poor guy never had a chance from beginning.
Massive retaliation is so stupid!