The sexy cool ones. You know the ones you just can't wait to see munch on someone. "Bite me! Bite her! Bite someone."
Okay, the poem. :)
This part is a real gem:
"dreams like vampires
are kindling for sunbeams"
"his heart bemoaned awakened
to drawn curtains
streaked in liquid tears"
If you don't mind a slight suggestion, I think having the words bemoaned and awakened side by side doesn't quite work. And liquid tears is okay, but it's a little redundant. All tears are liquid unless there is some sort of dust tears that vamps have. I'm guessing that's possible. ;)
Your poem has been mentioned in the New Poems thread over at the forum.
this is perfectly delicious. Very well written. Thanks
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