All Comments on 'Immortal Rebirth'

by jayke_online

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Ending is too abrupt

Also, some backstory on how Aliester knows Kat would have been nice. And who is the crone? Why is she so determined to kill Aliester? Was the Crone his victim? These unknowns make it hard to really get into the characters and care about them.

That being said, the build up to the consummation between Kat and Aliester was well written and exciting.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
CRAP

The Start was Good, The End..IF YOU WANT TO CALL IT THAT , WAS CRAP. And that is Being VERY POLITE. REDO.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
No!!!

You can't let the crone kill him! Please let him be with his love forever!

SouthernPassion53SouthernPassion53almost 6 years ago
Interesting

Dude, you've created a good story, but you need to think about a back story and continuing this storyline.

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