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by Syndra Lynn02/01/05

hard and soft bond in celestial sacrament

Great line! Over all I like this poem, but it's wordy. Tighten it up by losing the excess, and it drips eroticism.

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by Trent_Dutch02/02/05

New Poem Reviews

Your Poem has been mentioned on the New Poems Reviews for Tuesday 1st of February.

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by Bill Dada09/25/05

Drip

I like eroticism that drips. In this write the eroticism did more than drip, it washed off the page and got all over me. I think it needed all the words you used to do this.
I really loved
'as suddenly too tight denims beg freedom'
that line is so perfect.

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