by UncleWayne
The first chapter seemed to give hope of an exciting story line but the sex was too clinical with no buildup whatsoever. Beside proofread before you submit next time.
I love your story line, however I would recommend that you seek an editor, as it would make them that much more interesting! Look forward to hearing more of your stories! Do not let the Anonymous dumbasses deture you from sharing your stories!
I like your story line. I'd be more than happy to edit for you
I love you writings, I love incest themes but do however agree and you should proofread or get and editor. The obsession you have with a bald pussy is a little distracting. I prefer to keep mine neatly trimmed and so does my primary lovers.